Tuesday, January 4, 2011

MAGPIE/ Prompt #47

                                            Photo/ Willow/ Magpie Tales


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These lovers
may look aberrant to you.
Well.
Tend to your own ardor,
look at your attachments,
then speak.

The moon takes the sun
into itself in order to shine,
a cool orb absorbs the light,
eats the sun to keep going.

No matter how I pull my body away
I still fuse to you.
Hand elbows knees entwine,

and we pass into some jazz
with a hard beat,
a twist that some call art.


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What a way to start the poetic New Year..thank you Willow, for presenting this enigmatic image!!

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49 comments:

The Bug said...

Love this! I think it describes my relationship with my husband fairly well...

Andreas said...

Some very memorable lines here
"The moon takes the sun
into itself in order to shine", is one of those lines that ring so true, and seem so obvious, that you can't believe you didn't think of it yourself (of course you did think of it yourself):)

"No matter how I pull my body away
I still fuse to you".
Hand elbows knees entwine". I know that feeling. Who said love was all pleasant, without the supposed to?

Lyn said...

Hi Bug-
Thank you! Seems rather normal to me...

madamebutterfly said...

I looked at this weeks Prompt and thought "suffocating" - maybe I am not in the right frame of mind!! Enjoyed your piece.

Lyn said...

Hi Andreas-
Thanks for your kind words..yes, "good old love"..everything, isn't it? Otherwise why write about it...

girldaydreaming said...

very nice... your poem evokes a perfect kind of artful love...

Lyn said...

Hi madamebutterfly-
Something funny..I started this poem a few days ago..had no place to go with it till I saw the prompt..strange huh? Thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi girldaydreaming-
Thank you..and a bit of attachment!

Friko said...

A brilliant take on the magpie. seeing lovers entwined speaks of a probing heart to me.

Lovely!

Paul C said...

Love seems an aberration to observers. You capture their enchantment for each other perfectly. Jazz has a pulsing vitality.

Jingle said...

Glad to see you on good mood...
smart take.
keep smiling...

you rock.

Lyn said...

Hi Friko-
Thank you so much..I think I saw the lovers right away!

Marilyn said...

Yes, the pull of one against the other still fused. I like it.

Lyn said...

Hi Paul C-
You're so right about the lovers being in a world of their own..I think it was always so..

Lyn said...

Hi Jingle-
Thanks for your cheery comment..this was an interesting one to do!

kaykuala said...

It is a fusion with all its mysteries and it is art!

Lyn said...

Hi kaykuala-
Thanks..I'm glad you see things as I do!!

Lyn said...

Hi Marilyn-
Glad that you can see what I mean...thank you!!

Eliza said...

That describes, to me, the perfect relationship - one that functions, not by dependency, but by the natural flow of things.... like the laws that govern the universe.....like the influence of the moon on the ebb and flow of the tide ..... Such a well-structured and beautiful poem.

Lyn said...

Hi Eliza-
It's a very big compliment for me to read your comment, and I thank you..I feel much smarter now..see what you've done!!

kathew said...

yes! we are always in close touch with our sweethearts. Lovely poem.
I love your new header photo-beauiful image and thanks for your kind comments.

Lyn said...

Hi kathew-
I love what this prompt brought out in so many..and thanks for your lovely comment!
Just checked comment I left on yours, and it disappeared!! Will go back..

Brigid said...

I loved this, the last verse was gorgeous.

Lyn said...

Hi Brigid-
I'm so happy to welcome you here..thank you..
I admire your work very much..

rel said...

Lyn,
Truly, we are all a part of the same whole now aren't we? :)
rel

Lyn said...

Hi rel-
Wise words indeed..except we may forget when ego pops up!! Thanks for visiting...

Everyday Goddess said...

the passion of this is fantastic. very.

Lyn said...

Hi Everyday Goddess-
We don't always know what we're giving..so glad for your comment!

Deedee said...

an interesting piece, and a beautiful interpretation of it in your poem.

Lyn said...

Hi Deedee-
Welcome back..so glad to hear from you again! And thanks for the lovely comment..

Reflections said...

Love the lines, 'the moon takes the sun into itself in order to shine'... so true of a solid relationship and with art. Well done.

Lyn said...

Hi Reflections-
Thanks for the lovely comment..the poem just seemed to weave itself for me!

Derrick said...

A great interpretation of the image, Lyn! I particularly like the first stanza's admonition!

Lyn said...

Hi Derrick-
It was just a little lecture to start with! This whole thing was odd because I did part of the poem before I saw the image and then the Prompt nailed it for me....synchronisity!

Martin H. said...

I really like this!

Lyn said...

Hi Martin-
I'm so pleased with your comment..thank you for visiting!

Dick Jones said...

A fine take on passionate love reinforced with some memorable imagery.

Lyn said...

Hi Dick Jones-
I'm so glad you dropped by, and I do like your comment!

Nanka said...

Well interpreted prompt picture, beautifully expressed in your short poem.

Lyn said...

Hi Nanka-
I really appreciate your visit and enjoyed your words..thanks!!

Doctor FTSE said...

This is a very well written piece and a thoughtful interpretation of the prompt.

Mrs.Trellis said...

a cool orb absorbs the light
Cool? That's just like me!

Lyn said...

Hi Mrs. Trellis-
I just knew you were cool!..always thanks for charming comments...

Lyn said...

Hi Doctor FTSE-
This turned out to be an interesting challenge..so glad that you liked it..thanks..

Mrs.Trellis said...

Tend to your own ardor

My sentiments exactly!

Lyn said...

Hi Mrs.Trellis-
I do believe we tend to tell others how to conduct their affairs!! No, no...

Suko said...

So intriguing! You have some really powerful imagery here. :)

Lyn said...

Hi Suko-
Thanks for visiting..poetry does lead us to interesting places!!

Bee's Blog said...

This is a great read - love it. Excellent take on the prompt with some pretty amazing lines.

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