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There is a core inside the lamp
that spins when the spirit dances.
He has the face
of the man in the moon,
hides in a recess looking out,
stares at me as I press closer,
my hands in prayer,
my mind craving entry,
wishing to be able to take a whirl
within a fabled orb,
to dance with my dream lover.
I'm ready to shed reality
for a glow of the light within.
What if instead
the magic tipped over
and spilled,
the oil bubbled,
and spread a flame
to burn all reveries?
What if possibility died in the fire,
and only a charred confession remained?
What if I'm the only one left
and then I find
the man in the moon?
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41 comments:
This is so beautiful. Great imagery...
doomed if I do, doomed if I don't
Nice! You know how to handle extended metaphor. Worth reading more than once.
wondefully written (:
Hi gautami tripathy-
Thank you for visiting..I so appreciate your comment!
Hi Doctor FTSE-
Very kind..I too did read it more than once!!!
Hi Sezaaay-
Nice to see you here..and thanks so much!
Nice images! Here's my Magpie, Blue Genie.
I love where your imagination takes you with these prompts, Lyn. A magic lamp indeed!
I love how you tighten the lines without making the poem prosaic.
The narrative is strength of your poem. So much mystery to decipher, so one has to read it again and again. Thanks for the share :)
When The Lamps Never Light
Hi Derrick..
Thanks so much, Derrick..I really like the prompts because I truly don't know where or how they move me..good to have a source!!
Hi Arian-
Thank you for noticing the narrative..I seem to have to tell a story! Sometimes I too do not know what a line means, but I accept it anyway!!Such is poetry..
"What if the magic tipped out and spilled."
I love the imagery and enjoyed your magpie. :-)
My Magpie
Hi Susannah-
Sometimes I think it's a privilege to be able to write poetry..we get to find other poets!! Thank you so much...
very clever and lovely tale.
love the way you apply vocabularies to make it sound and fun to read.
Hi Book Bird Dog-
Thanks for visiting..good to hear from you!
Hi Jingle-
Always glad to hear from you and the nice things you have to say!!
I love that you wish to go into the lamp instead of getting who is in there out. I love that your dream lover might be there too. Reality is overrated! Oh, I really love this piece I surely do!
Possibility dying in fire ... deep and powerful writing, Lyn.
Hi Kristin-
You are more than kind..I seem to like entering other worlds!!
Hi Helen-
I think I fixed it so I would rise again..thanks so much!
Oh how I wd luv a magic lamp.
nice. may your man in the moon, or genie of the lamp find you...well before you are the last. smiles. nice magpie
Hi kathi-
Glad to meet you...and thanks!!
Hi Brian-
Always kind and insightful..thank you for your comments!
"What if possibility died in the fire,
and only a charred confession remained?"
Nice.
Again, Lyn...WOW! I had to read it over and over.
Hi Ana-
So glad you're here..thanks so much for visiting!
Hi Angie-
Thank you..always glad for your comments...
what ifs snuff out the flames of possibilty
beautifully written
Rene
Hi Rene-
That would be the worst..no possibility..Thank you so much ..
Wonderful imagery, nice flow... yet such a sad ending.
Nice write.
Hi Reflections-
Here's what I mean by "finding the man in the moon"..that possibilities aren't gone..that there's a glimmer of hope to start again..but then it matters what you see..that's what I as the writer find out..
so thanks..if you see saddness, I meant for there to be hope..there can be both!
A bit like the lady and the tiger. Decisions, decisions!
A dance with words, this piece reflects such wonder and imagination. A delightful read.
Hi Fireblossom-
You're so right..decisions, every day! Thanks...
Hi Tumblewords-
Glad to hear that you enjoyed this..so kind..thanks...
Beautiful. Now I must look for the man in the moon inside...
Hi Willow-
Thanks, as always..It's all on the inside!!
So many thoughts in this beautiful poem Lyn...as always it is amazing!
:-)
Hi Carrie-
Thank you..I feel lucky to be prompted!!
I love this one, Lyn! Especially "wishing to be able to take a whirl within a fabled orb, to dance with my dream lover." Wonderful imagery!
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