Sunday, March 20, 2011

YOUR LYING EYES/ Poetry Potluck #27



THIS WEEK, Poetry Potluck #27, presents us with the intriguing premise of LIES, DECEPTION, and MISREPRESENTATION.  Once again, they all seem to run together for me.  I also just discovered the poetic form, Tanka.  Seemed like a good opportunity to see where this will go.  A Tanka consists of five lines.  I wrote two Tankas, then realised that they could be combined to form one poem.  I guess that's OK!


YOUR LYING EYES

Your blue eyes, they smile
and wink with a romantic
promise to embrace
only me, then you turn
to see the girl entering...

Floating an untruth
on waters brackish with mud,
who will be deceived,
to think the torrent will clear
and the lie become honesty?


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25 comments:

Jingle said...

Floating an untruth
on waters brackish with mud,


superb and visual,
love it,

eloquent job, A++
Happy Potluck.

Krislin Neo, Ting (Syracuse Pike) said...

Yeah, eyes, they always reveal what's truly beneath...

Beautifully written.. a shade in grey..

Here is mine,

http://www.tingtasy.com/2011/03/collections-of-tings-poetry-tp119-lies.html – Lies

and

http://www.tingtasy.com/2011/03/collections-of-tings-poetry-tp118.html – Deception


Happy Monday!!! :)

Lyn said...

Hi Jingle-
Thanks so much for your comment..really appreciate it!

Lyn said...

Hi Krislin Neo-
Yes, we must stop and look into those eyes...thanks!!

thingy said...

I agree, the eyes tell so much.

Terrific tanka(s)

Lyn said...

Hi thingy-
Thank you..I really like the Tanka form!

JamieDedes said...

A classic old story in a new and well-written poem.

Fine Potluck. Enjoy your visits and visitors.

Poem on ...

Lyn said...

Hi Jamie-
Poem on, indeed!! Always, thanks for your visits...

Gaston Studio said...

Windows to the soul, the eyes reveal all... if one only looks. Very nice Lyn.

Lyn said...

Hi Jane-
Too often we're swept away by the charm of it all!! Old enough now to know better..thanks..

fiveloaf said...

love it! here's mine.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/25/paper-scribbles/

Olivia said...

oooh!
A very intense n powerful piece written!
Eyes are the windows to the soul- don't they say it often?

Sending you Love xx
(is that your twitter link?)

liv2write2day said...

Definitely okay with me to combine. I liked the use of the verb "floating"--I'm always looking for verbs that paint a picture.

booguloo said...

Recognized deception hurts.

Jingle Poetry said...

Greetings:

Week 27 Poetry Potluck is open, welcome/Thanks (4) joining us…share your poetry with us today…

Friendship Awards, Enjoy!

Happy Monday,
Bless you!
xxx

Kim Nelson said...

I've met the blue-eyed one you speak of!
Here's mine:
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2010/05/19/dysfunction/

Kavita said...

Ooohh...lovely!!
Those eyes can drift all places.. no? And it's annoying really to see that happen! (sigh)

Alas deception thrives.. and yet many a time, we simply fail to see it coming...

Well written, Lyn!!

Lyn said...

Hi fiveloaf-
So glad you like this..thanks!!

Lyn said...

Hi Olivia-
Yes indeed, the eyes have it! Thanks..following you now too!!

Lyn said...

Hi liv2write2day-
Me too, looking for any verbal pictures..thanks..

Lyn said...

Hi booguloo-
As long as we finally find the deception..it's good to be free! Thank you...

Lyn said...

Hi Jingle-
Blessings and greetings to you too!

Lyn said...

Hi Kim-
Ah yes, I think there's more than one..but we're survivors!!

Lyn said...

Hi Kavita-
The wandering eye..whew, that's one thing that really gets me too!Thank you...

Kathe W. said...

great poem for the prompt!

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