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METAPHORS ON A GRAIN OF SAND
What a joke,
who designed this trick of time?
As if it couldn't be more obvious
to even the most feverish of minds
that a grain of sand slipping
through a tiny breach
into a bowl of negative trials
and positive measures,
might represent my ephemeral life.
Which grains are prayer,
or magic charms I've used up
on my knees shooting craps?
Where is all the time I washed out,
and tell me,
do tears make a nasty sludge
of free flowing gush,
slowing down this blobby mess
to discernible poetry?
Yes, wasting my existence,
designed by a blase' fate
to keep on keeping on,
no matter what.
Well, I've got a trick up my sleeve,
I don't get just one tide,
I insist on ebbing too,
and if that won't deal me
a better sand castle,
I'll just stand on my head
and kick start
the whole flow
all over again.
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Thanks once more to Willow, for the opportunity to participate in the great Magpie Prompt!!
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40 comments:
"I don't get just one tide, I insist on ebbing too"
Wonderful, I enjoyed your magpie. :-)
subversive, yes! (in the best sense of the word)
I loved the same line as Susannah. Great write here. Love and Light, Sender
That last line is so great. Standing on your head should do the trick! ;^)
Hi Susannah-
Thanks for your kind comments..this was an interesting prompt to solve!
Hi Arian-
Interesting word..subversive...hmm..like it!! Thanks..
Hi sender..
Just plucked that one out of the air..Thanks so much!
Hi Willow-
Thanks for making so much possible..standing on my head, why not?
Standing on one's head may not be such a drastic feat to get another go but I know I'd have trouble! Clever interpretation, Lyn.
A Magpie for the ages ... meant to be savored over and over again!!!!
I love your take on the theme!!
well done!
:)
Hi Derrick-
You probably wouldn't have to do it, but my karma is so-so...anyway, thanks!
I totally love your poem! This trick of time....no joke! I'll be standing on my head very soon!
"Yes, wasting my existence,designed by a blase' fate..to keep on keeping on,no matter what "
Straight home hit for me..
Enjoyed ur magpie a great deal
Wonderfully written!
timeless flies search for fries
Hi Helen-
Wow..just thrilled by your comment!! Thank you...
Hi Gabriela-
So pleased that you liked it..Thanks!
Hi kathew-
Maybe I started a new trend..head standing..good for wrinkles, I hear! Thank you...
Hi Abhilasha-
I felt deeply about the "time" thing..don't I have anything to say? We all ask..thank you...
Hi gautami-
So happy you liked this..thanks..and I too am looking for perfect fries!
Aha - good for you!!
Hi Tumblewords-
How nice of you..thanks!!
Lynn,
Love your new header! It is new, yes?
Your piece is too appropo: just keep getting up and dusting yourself off and reach out time after time. ;)
rel
Hi rel-
The header is new, but I seem to switch around..a mood thing, I think..
Just keep putting one foot in front of the other..the rest will follow! Thanks..
Insist on it, is my advice.
Stand on your head and start all over again.
"...do tears make a nasty sludge
of free flowing gush,
slowing down this blobby mess..."
That was frickin' awesome.
Hi Friko-
I like your attitude..thanks for the support!
"What a joke"! And this gets better from there! I would like to quote the whole first stanza I liked it so much, then in the end standing on your head to start over is a 'throw away joke' of your own. Brilliant.
Hi tattytiara-
So pleased that you liked this..I think that tears do slow things up, not that there's anything wrong with that!
Hi Stafford-
Thanks so much..what's it all about if there's not some fun in it!!
I like the tide metaphor. Yes, time is cruel, but it is good to hope. Thanks for stopping by.
Hi David-
And thanks to you, too...The prompts, quite a great challenge!!
delightful...could not help but smile at tyour close...nice magpie!
Hi Brian-
Thanks again..Standing on my head..trying to gain control! Faulty thinking???
excellent!
Being born and raised in Reno I loved your take on the gambles in life and loved that you ultimately controlled the outcome. Excellent poem.
Hi C.M. Jackson-
Many thanks for visiting!
Hi Lydia-
Thanks so much..well, we can't let fate play every hand!!
Lyn this is awesome right up to the last line...i love it! :-)
Hi Carrie-
Thanks for visiting..I really appreciate your kind words!
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