Thursday, September 16, 2010

MAGPIE/ Prompt #32

                                           photo/ willow/ magpie tales



METAPHORS ON A GRAIN OF SAND


What a joke,
who designed this trick of time?
As if it couldn't be more obvious
to even the most feverish of minds
that a grain of sand slipping
through a tiny breach
into a bowl of negative trials
and positive measures,
might represent my ephemeral life.

Which grains are prayer,
or magic charms I've used up
on my knees shooting craps?

Where is all the time I washed out,
and tell me,
do tears make a nasty sludge
of free flowing gush,
slowing down this blobby mess
to discernible poetry?

Yes, wasting my existence,
designed by a blase' fate
to keep on keeping on,
no matter what.

Well, I've got a trick up my sleeve,
I don't get just one tide,
I insist on ebbing too,
and if that won't deal me
a better sand castle,
I'll just stand on my head
and kick start
the whole flow
all over again.


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Thanks once more to Willow, for the opportunity to participate in the great Magpie Prompt!!


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40 comments:

Susannah said...

"I don't get just one tide, I insist on ebbing too"

Wonderful, I enjoyed your magpie. :-)

Arian Tejano said...

subversive, yes! (in the best sense of the word)

senderupwords said...

I loved the same line as Susannah. Great write here. Love and Light, Sender

willow said...

That last line is so great. Standing on your head should do the trick! ;^)

Lyn said...

Hi Susannah-
Thanks for your kind comments..this was an interesting prompt to solve!

Lyn said...

Hi Arian-
Interesting word..subversive...hmm..like it!! Thanks..

Lyn said...

Hi sender..
Just plucked that one out of the air..Thanks so much!

Lyn said...

Hi Willow-
Thanks for making so much possible..standing on my head, why not?

Derrick said...

Standing on one's head may not be such a drastic feat to get another go but I know I'd have trouble! Clever interpretation, Lyn.

Helen said...

A Magpie for the ages ... meant to be savored over and over again!!!!

Gabriela Abalo said...

I love your take on the theme!!

well done!
:)

Lyn said...

Hi Derrick-
You probably wouldn't have to do it, but my karma is so-so...anyway, thanks!

kathew said...

I totally love your poem! This trick of time....no joke! I'll be standing on my head very soon!

Abhilasha-The Desire said...

"Yes, wasting my existence,designed by a blase' fate..to keep on keeping on,no matter what "

Straight home hit for me..

Enjoyed ur magpie a great deal

gautami tripathy said...

Wonderfully written!

timeless flies search for fries

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
Wow..just thrilled by your comment!! Thank you...

Lyn said...

Hi Gabriela-
So pleased that you liked it..Thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi kathew-
Maybe I started a new trend..head standing..good for wrinkles, I hear! Thank you...

Lyn said...

Hi Abhilasha-
I felt deeply about the "time" thing..don't I have anything to say? We all ask..thank you...

Lyn said...

Hi gautami-
So happy you liked this..thanks..and I too am looking for perfect fries!

Tumblewords: said...

Aha - good for you!!

Lyn said...

Hi Tumblewords-
How nice of you..thanks!!

rel said...

Lynn,
Love your new header! It is new, yes?
Your piece is too appropo: just keep getting up and dusting yourself off and reach out time after time. ;)
rel

Lyn said...

Hi rel-
The header is new, but I seem to switch around..a mood thing, I think..
Just keep putting one foot in front of the other..the rest will follow! Thanks..

Friko said...

Insist on it, is my advice.
Stand on your head and start all over again.

tattytiara said...

"...do tears make a nasty sludge
of free flowing gush,
slowing down this blobby mess..."

That was frickin' awesome.

Lyn said...

Hi Friko-
I like your attitude..thanks for the support!

Stafford Ray said...

"What a joke"! And this gets better from there! I would like to quote the whole first stanza I liked it so much, then in the end standing on your head to start over is a 'throw away joke' of your own. Brilliant.

Lyn said...

Hi tattytiara-
So pleased that you liked this..I think that tears do slow things up, not that there's anything wrong with that!

Lyn said...

Hi Stafford-
Thanks so much..what's it all about if there's not some fun in it!!

David said...

I like the tide metaphor. Yes, time is cruel, but it is good to hope. Thanks for stopping by.

Lyn said...

Hi David-
And thanks to you, too...The prompts, quite a great challenge!!

Brian Miller said...

delightful...could not help but smile at tyour close...nice magpie!

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
Thanks again..Standing on my head..trying to gain control! Faulty thinking???

C.M. Jackson said...

excellent!

Lydia said...

Being born and raised in Reno I loved your take on the gambles in life and loved that you ultimately controlled the outcome. Excellent poem.

Lyn said...

Hi C.M. Jackson-
Many thanks for visiting!

Lyn said...

Hi Lydia-
Thanks so much..well, we can't let fate play every hand!!

Carrie Burtt said...

Lyn this is awesome right up to the last line...i love it! :-)

Lyn said...

Hi Carrie-
Thanks for visiting..I really appreciate your kind words!

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