Friday, September 3, 2010

MAGPIE/ Prompt #30

                                                         photo/willow/ magpie tales



A VERY IMPORTANT APPLE

You mean that by my taking a bite,
there's no turning back,
I've shaped the sin of the world?

Who would have thought
this succulent fruit,
whose sap has trickled down my chin,
a syrupy residue laced
with purity, and oozing
towards my bosom,

would mark me
as the first offender?

Can it be, Mr.S,
the bite you enticed me to nibble,
plunged creation into vanity,

where all's over at the start,
all's conceit, and
I'm doomed
to a life of repentance?

A simple desire for a treat
did all that, you say?

Not fair, not fair!
I didn't know you'd change an apple
into a metaphor.


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Thank you to Willow for another challenging Prompt!! Please check all the other responders to her Magpie Tales.


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38 comments:

Helen said...

This was a juicy, yummy piece of work ... I loved it!

Everyday Goddess said...

The BEST!

fabulous magging.

Sam Liu said...

A clever, witty and strikingly profound magpie, Lyn. Of course, there is often a cross-over between symbolism and literalism, a nuance too many refuse to acknowledge.

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
So glad you liked it..thank you!!

Lyn said...

Hi Everyday Goddess-
Wow..thanks! The Mags are a great challenge, right?

Lyn said...

Hi Sam-
Leave it to you, Sam, to say something so flattering..I hardly know myself..thanks!!!

Gabriela Abalo said...

changing an apple into a metaphor isn't fair! I do agree ;)

nice Magpie.

Lyn said...

Hi Gabriela-
Definitely not fair..trapped again!!..thanks for visiting...

Blue Sky Dreaming said...

I so like your writing...wonderful play of thoughts and deeds such as a simple bite of apple! Apples dipped in honey this week has for me, the definition of "A sweet New Year" more than a juicy snack...love the metaphors.

Lyn said...

Hi Mary Ann-
I'm so grateful for your lovely thoughts..Apple and honey, suddenly have a real craving!!A Sweet New Year to you!!

Jeane said...

totally nailed it! xxo

Lyn said...

Hi Jeane-
Thanks, it was an interesting Prompt!

Brian Miller said...

and that is his wickedness...to appease us and leave us...our hands empty but the metaphors...smiles. nice mag!

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
Sooo..appease and leave..and we have to sort it out, for sure..
life on earth, huh? But our lesson, perhaps...laugh and detach!!
Thanks..

Jen said...

I may have eaten the apple, but you planted the seed, that grew into the tree, which bore this wonderful fruit...

Lyn said...

Hi Jen-
Very interesting comment..thank you!

spacedlaw said...

It was all the apple's fault anyway.

Lyn said...

Hi spacedlaw-
Sweetness and beauty, hmm..that is enticing!!
Thanks for coming by..

willow said...

Oh, gosh, what a clever weaving in of vanity and fair. Wonderful, Lyn!!

Lyn said...

Hi Willow-
Hat's off to you, m'dear. You have awakened the poetry bug,.
Someday "they" will look back and wonder why so many poems were written in 2010!

steviewren said...

It's all Mr S's fault! Curses on him!

Lyn said...

Hi steviewren-
Good comment...thanks..why not?

Tumblewords: said...

deliciously profound magpie!

Lyn said...

Hi Tumblewords-
How kind you are..thank you!

Angie Muresan said...

Personally, I don't think there's anything wrong with a little vanity. It's the *tricking* part that I'm not happy with. Brilliant magpie, Lyn.

A Cuban In London said...

This was such a naughty and humourous piece. Loved it. And you have watched 'Waltz with Bashir'. Great.

Many thanks for that poem. It's lightened up my day.

Greetings from London.

Lyn said...

Hi Angie-
Thanks so much..Yes, I agree we must stay on our toes and not be fooled !!!

Lyn said...

Greetings to a Cuban-
Thanks for the comment..and it's a pleasure to follow your reviews!!

dana said...

Sometimes a train is a train, a tunnel a tunnel, a cigar a cigar. And I will go down fighting the idea that a biblical bite from an apple or apricot is what brought mankind down the proverbial greased slide to sin.

I truly enjoyed the fact that I read something altogether different into your writing, again proving that what the story portends is more the concept of the reader than the writer!

BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN AND EXECUTED!

Lyn said...

Hi Dana-
Very interesting comment..theological texts have been an inspiration from the beginning..satire,inquisitions.. hardly a day goes by that I don't exclaim..Oh, God!! Waiting, waiting....

Friko said...

I am so glad you visited my blog and made me come over to read this poem.
It is excellent!

Lyn said...

Hi Friko-
It was my pleasure! Thank you so much...

Agneta said...

Your two blogs are so full of wisdom and poetry. It feels sacred and sensual to visit them.

Thank you soo for your comment on my WabiSabi blog & welcome to my autumn contest, please be my guest!

Agneta

Lyn said...

Hi Agneta-
What an uplifting comment..thank you!
And thanks for inviting me to the autumn poetry site...

Carolina Linthead said...

Wow...we did have similar ideas going. I love "would mark me as the first offender"! That is truly profound. I was struck, as well, by the Vanity Fair beneath the apple. Very well done! Thanks for stopping by my blog.

Lyn said...

Hi Carolina Linthead-
I love coincidense..thanks so much for visiting!

Derrick said...

Lots of well-deserved praise, Lyn. You made this pretty sensual too!

Lyn said...

Hi Derrick-
Poor Eve...Thank you..this was just plain fun for me..I accept no guilt, in reality!!

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