Sunday, September 16, 2012

MAGPIE...Prompt #135

                                     VENUS AND THE SAILOR/ 1925/ Salvador Dali

The rhythm of a Pantoum, feels like a dance to me....Thank you Tess, at Magpie Tales.


Don't take the dance from me.
I give my word not to wait
for intoxicating applause.
Just need my heartbeat to do a jig.

I give my word not to wait.
Dancing is my body's dream,
just need my heartbeat to do a jig
when a melody seduces me.

Dancing is my body's dream,
it bubbles from the source
when a melody seduces me,
weaves my karma into a waltz.

It bubbles from the source,
embraces me at nativity,
weaves my karma into a waltz.
Simply want to keep on dancing.

Embraces me at nativity
for intoxicating applause,
simply want to keep on dancing.
Don't take the dance from me.

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Tess Kincaid said...

Lovely form...keep dancing Lyn...

Brian Miller said...

ha i love to dance....i dance in church, i dance at the store....i dance when i get bored....yeah my wife puts up with it...noticed i did not say i was any good...smiles...

the nativity line at the end gave me pause for a moment...

Lyn said...

Hi Tess-
Won't stop! the form too!

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
Keep dancing! Bet you're good.
Now with the pantoum, the line, when repeated, has to be where it's choice. That sometime gives it a mysterious, enigmatic meaning..why I like this form!

kaykuala said...

Such a wonderful pantoum form Lyn! Takes some good thinking it getting it done. You did it nicely!


Lyn said...

Hi Hank-
Thank you..sometimes doing a pantoum really drives me nuts! But always a fun challenge..

izzy said...

I like your dancing ! me too-

Lyn said...

Hi izzy-
Thanks so much...if I had it to do all over again I'd be a Broadway gypsy (dancer)!!

Helen said...

So lovely .. a complex form, you have mastered it, Lyn.

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
Thank you..I have to be very careful to follow the pantoum rules! But fun...

Little Nell said...

Oh I do like poetry written to a form. I've never tried this one, but you've done a splendid job.

Silent Otto said...

And youll go a Waltzing Matilda dor me , Lyn, i cant dance to save my life, but my soul sings when i read your exhilarating words ! , cheers.

Kathe W. said...

oh yes- keep on dancing!

Other Mary said...

I echo Tess's comment - lovely form. I have never been able to do these, and you make it flow effortlessly.

Trellissimo said...

Dance on! :)

Lyn said...

Hi Little Nell-
Thank you for the comment..It does take a lot of concentration...not my best trait!

Lyn said...

Hi Kutamun-
Bet you can... Everyone can dance..just start by tapping your foot...let me know!

Lyn said...

Hi Kathe W.-
No chance that I'll stop! Thanks..

Lyn said...

Hi Other Mary-
One of the reasons I like this form is it has a life of its own...thank you!

Lyn said...

Hi Trellissimo-
Thank you... I will...shall we dance?

21 Wits said...

Oh this is so real...I have a dear friend who lives to dance and has made quite a living at it...but now she had to have a bit of surgery so she can dance again...yes, yes, if it's your dream if it's cries from your dance and dance!

Lyn said...

Hi Karen S.
I will..I will!!! Hope your friend can dance again..thanks!

Anonymous said...

nice post thanks for sharing looking for to visit more..blessings


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