VENUS AND THE SAILOR/ 1925/ Salvador Dali
The rhythm of a Pantoum, feels like a dance to me....Thank you Tess, at Magpie Tales.
THE BODY'S DREAM
Don't take the dance from me.
I give my word not to wait
for intoxicating applause.
Just need my heartbeat to do a jig.
I give my word not to wait.
Dancing is my body's dream,
just need my heartbeat to do a jig
when a melody seduces me.
Dancing is my body's dream,
it bubbles from the source
when a melody seduces me,
weaves my karma into a waltz.
It bubbles from the source,
embraces me at nativity,
weaves my karma into a waltz.
Simply want to keep on dancing.
Embraces me at nativity
for intoxicating applause,
simply want to keep on dancing.
Don't take the dance from me.
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23 comments:
Lovely form...keep dancing Lyn...
ha i love to dance....i dance in church, i dance at the store....i dance when i get bored....yeah my wife puts up with it...noticed i did not say i was any good...smiles...
the nativity line at the end gave me pause for a moment...
Hi Tess-
Won't stop! thanks..love the form too!
Hi Brian-
Keep dancing! Bet you're good.
Now with the pantoum, the line, when repeated, has to be where it's placed..no choice. That sometime gives it a mysterious, enigmatic meaning..why I like this form!
Such a wonderful pantoum form Lyn! Takes some good thinking it getting it done. You did it nicely!
Hank
Hi Hank-
Thank you..sometimes doing a pantoum really drives me nuts! But always a fun challenge..
I like your dancing ! me too-
thanks.
Hi izzy-
Thanks so much...if I had it to do all over again I'd be a Broadway gypsy (dancer)!!
So lovely .. a complex form, you have mastered it, Lyn.
Hi Helen-
Thank you..I have to be very careful to follow the pantoum rules! But fun...
Oh I do like poetry written to a form. I've never tried this one, but you've done a splendid job.
And youll go a Waltzing Matilda dor me , Lyn, i cant dance to save my life, but my soul sings when i read your exhilarating words ! , cheers.
oh yes- keep on dancing!
I echo Tess's comment - lovely form. I have never been able to do these, and you make it flow effortlessly.
Dance on! :)
Hi Little Nell-
Thank you for the comment..It does take a lot of concentration...not my best trait!
Hi Kutamun-
Bet you can... Everyone can dance..just start by tapping your foot...let me know!
Hi Kathe W.-
No chance that I'll stop! Thanks..
Hi Other Mary-
One of the reasons I like this form is it has a life of its own...thank you!
Hi Trellissimo-
Thank you... I will...shall we dance?
Oh this is so real...I have a dear friend who lives to dance and has made quite a living at it...but now she had to have a bit of surgery so she can dance again...yes, yes, if it's your dream if it's cries from your veins...dance...and dance and dance!
Hi Karen S.
I will..I will!!! Hope your friend can dance again..thanks!
nice post thanks for sharing looking for to visit more..blessings
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