photo/ tess kincaid
REALLY INTRIGUED by Magpie Tales #76 Thanks again Tess, for the challenge.
TIN GOD
Little Tin God,
you fooled at first
with bravura whirring,
grinning enigmatically,
pretending to be
a knight in shining armor.
Your fool's gold is chipping, warped,
rusty at heart,
makeup slipping,
parts assembled from cheap tricks.
Lost in the archeology
of the five and dime.
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28 comments:
You never disappoint...this one no exception...so Love the last line!
Hi Blue Sky...
Always appreciate your kind and generous words...thanks!
nice...love the progression or should i say disassembling of the person to perhaps their true form...
Well...maybe he's sort of a cut-rate, bargain knight?
This is one of my 'Lyn Favorites!'
Love that last line, perfect.
Hi Brian-
We build 'em up, tear 'em down...gotta get those stars out of our eyes...thanks so much!!
Hi Fireblossom-
Too many of that sort around these days...politics, anyone? Thanks for dropping by!
Hi Helen-
Oohhh, that's so nice...thank you!
Hi Christine-
That line just floated by..so I took it!! ha...thanks so much!
Seeing what lies beyond the facade. A well written depiction of this all too familiar theme of life and love.
I feel it for the Little Tin God...It's a shame when the rust sets in!
Hi Marbles...
Thanks for visiting..I so appreciate your comment!
Hi Lena-
That's it...the rust always sets in for little tin gods!! Thanks so much...
I'm always so impressed on your writing!
Very well done on the prompt!
Margie :)
..’lost in the archaeology…’ sets the tone of the preceding lines.. i thought of a metal flower when i saw the photo yesterday but when i read yours… yeah, it’s Tin God too.. i like it!(:
~Kelvin
Hi Margie-
This was a bit of a challenge, but ultimately interesting to do...thanks!!
Hi Windowlad-
It's interesting what these images suggest..suddenly words come..the whole process is amazing to me..creativity, art...where does it come from..oh, maybe the source!!
Thanks, Kelvin...
Lyn, you really described the furtive and temporal nature of life in this poem. Also - how we take for granted the value of our surroundings, as so perfectly (and wryly) in the last line. Love it!
Rick
Hi Rick-
We seem to fall for the glitz so fast..in politics, love, keeping up..and then we see through it, if we're lucky. I really appreciate your input here...thank you!
I love this!!
Hi Tess-
No doubt your pics are so inspirational...thanks for what you do!!
Very nicely done. Too many tin gods these days.
— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
A clever and effective sustained metaphor. A good read.
Hi Kay-
Definitely too much ego around these days..Thanks!!
Hi Dick-
So glad that you enjoyed this..and thanks for the visit!
This is brilliant Lyn....love it!
Hi Carrie-
Thanks for the lovely comment..
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