FOR Poetry Potluck #48, we are given the topic of "Passionate Nights of Love"...
LAST BREATH
Frangipani under the bed,
wafting promise.
Tendrils of weeping willow
at my window,
when the embrace goes cold.
Dust finally defines my body,
remembering the past nights
when our touches
were made of dew,
as if Scheherazade
lived under my skin.
Am I dead still,
looking for a life,
or born all over again
to find your caress.
Banish tears from my pillow,
let your mouth taste my words.
If only last breaths
could summon up
the craze of passion
instead of fear.
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20 comments:
stanza before last is so touching, with a little bit of fragility to it, awesome word!! FELT!!!
Enjoy the potluck!!!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/smokescreen/
Wonderful writing! Sensual and longing at the same time.
Here's my offering for Potluck 48: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/the-lake/
Every line flows nicely...works for me! As said before, a mix of sensual and longing!
Lyn, another writing that I really enjoyed!
*Banish tears from my pillow
let your mouth taste my words
Beautiful and touching words.
Margie :)
this was a beautiful poem about lust, and longing....its a sensual poem...great word bank
Very vivid and lovely, it so captures the feel of two lovers caught up in passion. I especially like 'as if Scheherezade lived under my skin' for lovers weave a multitude of stories. 'Let your mouth taste my words' is especially sensual.
Hi lynnaima-
Thank you so much...for me this poem was a walk with love and sometimes it feels like dying...
Hi Marbles...
Thanks..I see it that way too!
Hi Blue Sky-
So glad you liked this..I tried to really "feel" this one!
Hi Margie-
So pleased that you commented about this..always appreciate your words...
Hi Chim's World...
Thank you so much..it was really fun to do!
beautifully crafted words...really passionate!
ahhh, summoning Sheherezade - always a good idea for establishing the tone of a poem about the sensoual! :o) Enjoyed this.
Hi Kalyan-
Thank you for your generous words, this was interesting to work on!
Hi Melissa-
So glad you enjoyed this..liked finding the different levels.
Hi PhotoDiction-
Happy that you enjoyed this..fun to do!
Banish tears from my pillow,
let your mouth taste my words.
love the lines, well done!
Hi Morning-
Good to hear from you..thanks for your comment!
divine poetry,
keep it up.
Cheers.
Hi Jingle-
Will definitely keep it up...thanks!
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