EVERYTHING'S BUILT IN with an Edward Hopper. Thanks to Tess for this presentation for Magpie Tales #77.
DREAM GIRL
So you're taking a road
that's less fractured,
no weeds,
just sweet blossoms
from Aphrodite's garden
blowing cheap perfume
into your dreams.
How far will I fall,
without dawn in your grip?
Can I find a link
to another hero
who's learned to sweat
at five in the morning?
Pull down your canvas sack,
don't forget the honeyed words.
Grind them under your heel
with the half smoked illusions.
Pack them up.
Then embrace the smolder
till a new genie takes form,
and gargoyles at the window
giggle at your good fortune.
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43 comments:
dang love the gritty undertones to this..the canvas sack, ground under heal and the gargoyles...tightly spun little tale...
The picture painted of incoming uneasiness, ghostly episodes in tandem with the quiet and dark night. loved it!
Who doesn't remember those sweet blossoms from Aphrodite's garden?
:-)
Hi Brian-
I sort of felt like the director of this little movie..Hopper is such a "set"...thanks!
Hi Isabel-
Thank you...love your comment!
Hi kaykuala-
I felt that the painting had so many levels...glad you enjoyed the result..thanks!
Hi Berowne-
Indeed, our myths are so captivating..thanks for visiting!
To begin with, I love Hopper and his work and you've totally created the atmosphere that he painted in. I'm right there in the hard reality of the post-depression era, grabbing hold of what I can get.
Hi Victoria-
That Hopper!! I feel that I sooo know him...a bit of cynicism after the depression? I agree with you...
blowing cheap perfume
into your dreams.-
great line, a great read, Lyn.
This feels edgy and has a feeling of not caring between our two "actors" here. That can spell trouble...
Well done.
Hi Brigid-
Thank you so much..I think I should only observe Hopper!!
Hi bodhirose-
I think these two players are ready for splitsville!! Thank you...
wow, Lyn, this packs a hard punch. love the bit about grinding it underfoot xxo
Hi Jeane-
No doubt, I really felt this one..thanks..xxx
I wish I had told a few to shove off like that!
Great write, Lyn.
*pull down your canvas sack
don't forget the words.
Grind them under your heel
with the half smoked illusions.
Pack them up.
Awesome words!
Hi Everyday Goddess-
Me too...I only write tough!!..Thank you..
Hi Margie-
So glad for your comment...thanks!
a wonderful tale
This is just a great write. Very tough.
Hi Suz-
Thank you so much..happy to hear from you...
Hi Mama Zen-
Thank you..I really like the "tough" part!!
Oh there was just something so powerful about this. Thanks for sharing Lyn and loving the header on top too!
Hi 120 Socks-
Glad you like the header..it really got to me!..Also many thanks for your comment!
Hi Lyn, thanks for stopping by my new blog. I like your poem a lot, the muscularity of it---I've been thinking about the muscular structure of a poem. So much stillness in this Hopper painting...so much tension and waiting, the muscles tense, the action just about to let go....
Great images... especially at the end. Love the tone of this, too.
Hi Kathryn-
Like your new blog..and your ideas about structure. Hopper is all about finding the heartbeat..I like that in writing too. What is the subject really all about?
Check out his famous Nighthawks..what a stage setting..waiting for Godot?
Hi Laurie-
No doubt, I got wrapped up in this..it's Hopper...he breaks the barrier for isolation..
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it..
I loved the way you have weaved words & played with them.
Excellent!
Hi Erratic Thoughts-
Welcome..happy to receive your kind words!
Lovely and plucky. Great visuals on reading. Thank you! ... Love Hopper too ...
Hi Jamie-
I got a lot of help from the painting...without a doubt!! Thanks..
Great read, Lyn. I'd sure like that other hero link.... Nice visuals!
Hi Lena-
Thank you..I'll send you the link as soon as I find it..hah..
Lyn, this is beautiful. Every word.
Hi Helen-
Thanks..so glad that you liked these words...
nice images in this one...
Hi blackswanpoetry-
Welcome and thanks for your lovely comment...
Yes, I feel a bitter edge in this, but so beautifully written, Lyn.
Hi thingy-
I definitely agree that she isn't really wishing him well! Thanks...
Excellent - 'So your taking a road that's less fractured' - what an icredible line to begin a great write.
Hi Bee's Blog-
I so appreciate your very kind words..
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