THE TOPIC FOR THIS WEEK'S Poetry Potluck #42, is Siblings, Cousins and Friends. The form I chose for my poem, is the PANTOUM, a set of repetition of lines.
INSTANT FRIENDSHIP
A social butterfly alights
high on my cheek
and whispers a message of craving,
enticing as a gift.
High on my cheek
A Monarch seeks to persuade me,
enticing as a gift,
memories that have gone before.
A Monarch seeks to persuade me,
I need a friend indeed.
Memories that have gone before
bring out the lure of closeness.
I need a friend indeed,
he tells me all aflutter.
Bring out the lure of closeness,
now merely shadows and specters.
He tells me all aflutter
and whispers a message of craving.
Now merely shadows and specters,
a social butterfly alights.
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9 comments:
hmmm enjoyable, nice imagery, touching, beautiful :)
happy potluck!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/06/29/everlasting-tempo/
I'm impressed, Lyn! The pantoum is a tough form to pull off. I read once that Joyce Carol Oates said penning a pantoum was almost like going mad. I've only written one.
GREAT job!
Beautifully done, Lyn.
I loved this!
Margie :)
Hi lynnaima-
Such nice words...thank you..and happy potluck to you!!
Hi Bryce-
I love the Pantoum, and it does drive me crazy..I have to keep a road map when I write one...but I like that it has a life of its own!
Hi Margie-
So pleased...thanks for your lovely comment!
apt metaphor.
great take on the theme.
Cheers.
Hi Jingle-
So pleased for your support...thanks!!
Invite you to write for week 5 challenge,
Hope all is well.
Thanks for the attention.
Appreciate your input.
Cheers.
keep it up. bless your weekend.
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