THE THEME this week at Poetry Potluck #45 is NATURE and LIFE. Here's a Haiku and a Pantoum.
SLICE
A slice of life please.
Pile everything atop it,
I'll take it to go...
LIFE AGAIN
I catch a sliver of light
as birth receives me.
It looks just as bright
as the light of Nirvana.
As birth receives me,
shapes and forms wave me on,
as the light of Nirvana
seems the same as life.
Shapes and forms wave me on.
I'm hoping to enter paradise,
seems the same as life.
Maybe I'm wide of the mark.
I'm hoping to enter paradise,
it looks just as bright.
Maybe I'm wide of the mark.
I catch a sliver of light.
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18 comments:
your Haiku blows me away, superb.
your poem is stunning, what a delicious treat.
Happy Potluck.
Beautiful blog and wonderful post.
Love 'em!
Big fan of the formals here. You've done a great job with these!
Nice piece
I like both of these, and am always amazed at the detailed picture which can be painted with so few words. Excellent writing.
Both were well worth the read. Thanks for sharing!
Hi Jingle-
Lovely comments! I enjoy both forms...thanks!
Hi Valerie-
Thanks so much and welcome! This was very interesting for me...
Hi Bryce-
This was a case of forms saving me..especally the Pantoum, which sort of writes itself at some point..goes right into my unconscious..if you know what I mean!
Hi jeaniemcbain-
So glad you liked it! Thanks...
Hi Marbles in My Pocket-
I join you in amazement...how we can come up with a word picture, that can say so much!! Thank you...
Hi booguloo-
Thanks for the lovely comment..I appreciate it!
oh, Lyn, the slice of life is just wonderful xo
Hi Jeane-
So happy to hear from you. and your comment!!
loved the first and I concur!! :)
enjoy the potluck!!!
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Hi lynnaima-
Good to hear from you..maybe short and sweet is best!!
Loved SLICE and adored LIFE AGAIN.
Wonderful writings, Lyn.
Hi Margie-
Fun and a challenge to write...thanks!!
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