Sunday, December 4, 2011

MAGPIE/ Prompt #94


                                                Lunch/ George Tooker/ 1964


AN INSPIRATION for this week's Magpie Tales from Tess Kincaid.


SAY SOMETHING

Looking for a cuppa Joe,
I came across a resistant morning.
The gush of the weather
drove me indoors.

Neon flashed: EATS.

I made myself diaphanous,
the better to pick and choose
floating wisdom.
My sixth sense tingled
from sundry communiques.
Under my breath I commanded,

chew that last crumb,
brush a bitten lip,
wonder about tonight's
Blue Plate Special.

Are you lonely today?
Say something to me.
The coffee's cold,
no time for a refill.

The weather has changed,
look out the window.
You don't even know.


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30 comments:

Sub-Radar-Mike said...

I knew this prompt would produce some gems from the community :]

The Cello Strings said...

Are you lonely today?
Say something to me.
The coffee's cold,
no time for a refill.

The weather has changed,
look out the window.
You don't even know.


Great lines, a magpie tale carries humanity and caring nature.

well done.

Lyn said...

Hi Mike-
This painting was inspirational, no doubt...thanks!!

Lyn said...

Hi Cello Strings-
Thanks so much for your generous words!

DCW said...

Your language fits the atmosphere - nicely done.

Lyn said...

Hi DCW-
That's all I wanted to do..thanks for noticing!!

Helen said...

Making oneself diaphanous - love that line / image. Well done, Lyn.

Suz said...

atmosphere....spot on

Brian Miller said...

there is a great disconnection in teh pic that is conveyed in your words very well...it is a bit disjointed at times which also fits well with the picture...

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
Thank you..I think this painting has a magic about it...

Lyn said...

Hi Suz-
Yes, if ever a painting ever had atmosphere...thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
I so felt the alienation..it seemed to me that nothing could be connected...thank you so much...right!!

Tumblewords: said...

You so captured the dissonance in this painting. Great!

Carrie Burtt said...

An amazing take Lyn....love it!!

Lyn said...

Hi Tumblewords-
Thanks for your comment..that painting...really did it..

Lyn said...

Hi Carrie-
So pleased that you enjoyed this..thank you!

Laurie Kolp said...

So much depth to this, Lyn.

Lyn said...

Hi Laurie-
Thank you..I've noticed that this pic has brought out a lot of depth..

Other Mary said...

Lots of great lines here, I like the 'gush of weather' and making yourself 'diaphanous'
Always trust that sixth sense!

Lyn said...

Hi Other Mary-
Absolutely...the 6th sense! Appreciate your comment...thanks..

thingy said...

And you certainly captured the atmosphere. Well done. : )

Lyn said...

Hi thingy-
Thanks...I found this to be very intriguing..

Trellissimo said...

Excellent, sensitive write.

Lyn said...

Hi Trellissimo-
I really appreciate your comment...thanks so much!

rel said...

Lynn,
I'm taking a bye this week to finish some course work but wanted to see your take on this.
Your poem reflects the the dissonent atmosphere among the sameness. Everybody is the same, even the black man, but no one takes time to notice.
rel

Lyn said...

Hi Rel-
Thanks for stoppong by and good luck with projects! I sort of got the existential who-ha's when I saw this painting..

Isabel Doyle said...

I love your 'resistant morning'

HyperCRYPTICal said...

An excellent write that captures the atmosphere perfectly.

Anna :o]

Lyn said...

Hi Isabel-
There were some many ideas tucked away in this painting..thank you...

Lyn said...

Hi HyperCRYPTICal-
Like others, this was very strong for me..thanks, Anna..

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