Monday, August 1, 2011

MAGPIE/ Prompt #76


                                                       photo/ tess kincaid


REALLY INTRIGUED by Magpie Tales #76  Thanks again Tess, for the challenge.


TIN GOD

Little Tin God,
you fooled at first
with bravura whirring,
grinning enigmatically,
pretending to be
a knight in shining armor.

Your fool's gold is chipping, warped,
rusty at heart,
makeup slipping,
parts assembled from cheap tricks.

Lost in the archeology
of the five and dime.


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28 comments:

Blue Sky Dreaming said...

You never disappoint...this one no exception...so Love the last line!

Lyn said...

Hi Blue Sky...
Always appreciate your kind and generous words...thanks!

Brian Miller said...

nice...love the progression or should i say disassembling of the person to perhaps their true form...

Fireblossom said...

Well...maybe he's sort of a cut-rate, bargain knight?

Helen said...

This is one of my 'Lyn Favorites!'

Christine said...

Love that last line, perfect.

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
We build 'em up, tear 'em down...gotta get those stars out of our eyes...thanks so much!!

Lyn said...

Hi Fireblossom-
Too many of that sort around these days...politics, anyone? Thanks for dropping by!

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
Oohhh, that's so nice...thank you!

Lyn said...

Hi Christine-
That line just floated by..so I took it!! ha...thanks so much!

Marbles in My Pocket said...

Seeing what lies beyond the facade. A well written depiction of this all too familiar theme of life and love.

Lena said...

I feel it for the Little Tin God...It's a shame when the rust sets in!

Lyn said...

Hi Marbles...
Thanks for visiting..I so appreciate your comment!

Lyn said...

Hi Lena-
That's it...the rust always sets in for little tin gods!! Thanks so much...

Margie said...

I'm always so impressed on your writing!
Very well done on the prompt!

Margie :)

WINDOWLAD said...

..’lost in the archaeology…’ sets the tone of the preceding lines.. i thought of a metal flower when i saw the photo yesterday but when i read yours… yeah, it’s Tin God too.. i like it!(:

~Kelvin

Lyn said...

Hi Margie-
This was a bit of a challenge, but ultimately interesting to do...thanks!!

Lyn said...

Hi Windowlad-
It's interesting what these images suggest..suddenly words come..the whole process is amazing to me..creativity, art...where does it come from..oh, maybe the source!!
Thanks, Kelvin...

R. Burnett Baker said...

Lyn, you really described the furtive and temporal nature of life in this poem. Also - how we take for granted the value of our surroundings, as so perfectly (and wryly) in the last line. Love it!

Rick

Lyn said...

Hi Rick-
We seem to fall for the glitz so fast..in politics, love, keeping up..and then we see through it, if we're lucky. I really appreciate your input here...thank you!

Tess Kincaid said...

I love this!!

Lyn said...

Hi Tess-
No doubt your pics are so inspirational...thanks for what you do!!

Kay L. Davies said...

Very nicely done. Too many tin gods these days.
— K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Dick said...

A clever and effective sustained metaphor. A good read.

Lyn said...

Hi Kay-
Definitely too much ego around these days..Thanks!!

Lyn said...

Hi Dick-
So glad that you enjoyed this..and thanks for the visit!

Carrie Burtt said...

This is brilliant Lyn....love it!

Lyn said...

Hi Carrie-
Thanks for the lovely comment..

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