Monday, August 8, 2011

MAGPIE/ Prompt #77


                                                      Edward Hopper/ Summer Evening

EVERYTHING'S BUILT IN with an Edward Hopper.  Thanks to Tess for this presentation for Magpie Tales #77.


DREAM GIRL
So you're taking a road
that's less fractured,
no weeds,
just sweet blossoms
from Aphrodite's garden
blowing cheap perfume
into your dreams.

How far will I fall,
without dawn in your grip?
Can I find a link
to another hero
who's learned to sweat
at five in the morning?

Pull down your canvas sack,
don't forget the honeyed words.
Grind them under your heel
with the half smoked illusions.
Pack them up.

Then embrace the smolder
till a new genie takes form,
and gargoyles at the window
giggle at your good fortune.


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44 comments:

Brian Miller said...

dang love the gritty undertones to this..the canvas sack, ground under heal and the gargoyles...tightly spun little tale...

Isabel said...

great post

kaykuala said...

The picture painted of incoming uneasiness, ghostly episodes in tandem with the quiet and dark night. loved it!

Berowne said...

Who doesn't remember those sweet blossoms from Aphrodite's garden?
:-)

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
I sort of felt like the director of this little movie..Hopper is such a "set"...thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi Isabel-
Thank you...love your comment!

Lyn said...

Hi kaykuala-
I felt that the painting had so many levels...glad you enjoyed the result..thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi Berowne-
Indeed, our myths are so captivating..thanks for visiting!

Victoria said...

To begin with, I love Hopper and his work and you've totally created the atmosphere that he painted in. I'm right there in the hard reality of the post-depression era, grabbing hold of what I can get.

Lyn said...

Hi Victoria-
That Hopper!! I feel that I sooo know him...a bit of cynicism after the depression? I agree with you...

Brigid said...

blowing cheap perfume
into your dreams.-

great line, a great read, Lyn.

bodhirose said...

This feels edgy and has a feeling of not caring between our two "actors" here. That can spell trouble...

Well done.

Lyn said...

Hi Brigid-
Thank you so much..I think I should only observe Hopper!!

Lyn said...

Hi bodhirose-
I think these two players are ready for splitsville!! Thank you...

Jeane said...

wow, Lyn, this packs a hard punch. love the bit about grinding it underfoot xxo

Lyn said...

Hi Jeane-
No doubt, I really felt this one..thanks..xxx

Everyday Goddess said...

I wish I had told a few to shove off like that!

Margie said...

Great write, Lyn.

*pull down your canvas sack
don't forget the words.
Grind them under your heel
with the half smoked illusions.
Pack them up.

Awesome words!

Lyn said...

Hi Everyday Goddess-
Me too...I only write tough!!..Thank you..

Lyn said...

Hi Margie-
So glad for your comment...thanks!

Suz said...

a wonderful tale

Mama Zen said...

This is just a great write. Very tough.

Lyn said...

Hi Suz-
Thank you so much..happy to hear from you...

Lyn said...

Hi Mama Zen-
Thank you..I really like the "tough" part!!

120 Socks said...

Oh there was just something so powerful about this. Thanks for sharing Lyn and loving the header on top too!

Lyn said...

Hi 120 Socks-
Glad you like the header..it really got to me!..Also many thanks for your comment!

Kathryn Stripling Byer said...

Hi Lyn, thanks for stopping by my new blog. I like your poem a lot, the muscularity of it---I've been thinking about the muscular structure of a poem. So much stillness in this Hopper painting...so much tension and waiting, the muscles tense, the action just about to let go....

Laurie Kolp said...

Great images... especially at the end. Love the tone of this, too.

Lyn said...

Hi Kathryn-
Like your new blog..and your ideas about structure. Hopper is all about finding the heartbeat..I like that in writing too. What is the subject really all about?

Check out his famous Nighthawks..what a stage setting..waiting for Godot?

Lyn said...

Hi Laurie-
No doubt, I got wrapped up in this..it's Hopper...he breaks the barrier for isolation..
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it..

Erratic Thoughts said...

I loved the way you have weaved words & played with them.
Excellent!

Lyn said...

Hi Erratic Thoughts-
Welcome..happy to receive your kind words!

JamieDedes said...

Lovely and plucky. Great visuals on reading. Thank you! ... Love Hopper too ...

Lyn said...

Hi Jamie-
I got a lot of help from the painting...without a doubt!! Thanks..

Lena said...

Great read, Lyn. I'd sure like that other hero link.... Nice visuals!

Lyn said...

Hi Lena-
Thank you..I'll send you the link as soon as I find it..hah..

Helen said...

Lyn, this is beautiful. Every word.

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
Thanks..so glad that you liked these words...

blackswanpoetry said...

nice images in this one...

Lyn said...

Hi blackswanpoetry-
Welcome and thanks for your lovely comment...

thingy said...

Yes, I feel a bitter edge in this, but so beautifully written, Lyn.

Lyn said...

Hi thingy-
I definitely agree that she isn't really wishing him well! Thanks...

Bee's Blog said...

Excellent - 'So your taking a road that's less fractured' - what an icredible line to begin a great write.

Lyn said...

Hi Bee's Blog-
I so appreciate your very kind words..

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