Monday, December 3, 2012

MAGPIE...Prompt #146

 
 
OBJECT TO BE DESTROYED/ Man Ray
 
 
 
THANK YOU, Tess, for Magpie Tales....
 
 
 
TRY
 
Great saints, even Joan and Polycarp,
having doubt at the final bind to the tree,
reach through the burn for the brass ring.
 
What if heaven's eye opens to darkness,
time is a click, nothing more,
and a name engraved on a stone
is all there is?  Born and died,
a box of days, laid in the earth.
 
Martyrs sway with their last breath,
hearing a requiem
as they approach the endless blaze,
sputter like twigs,
 
try to take wing,
find their soul,
grab hold of the savior's hem.
 
 
 
Copyright/ all rights reserved/ 2012
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 


28 comments:

Anonymous said...

Find their soul, grab hold of the saviour's hem - I believe that they do.

Well crafted and a most interesting take on the prompt.

21 Wits said...

Oh my goodness, a perfect describing of such a piece as this weeks' offering. Which now I'm at a loss! I like to sense my own thoughts before diving into other posts! Once I realized it was your Mag post I couldn't stop reading. Most inspiring, thanks.

Margaret said...

...a box of days!! And the last lines are lovely.

Lyn said...

Hi ReBelle-
I believe it too!! So glad you enjoyed this..thank you!

Lyn said...

Hi Karen S.
I too never read any until I'm done with mine..I just like to sort of "receive" the words..thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi Margaret-
Thanks,this took its own path, as usual..

Tess Kincaid said...

...a box of days, laid in the earth...I love that...beautiful beautiful write, Lyn...

Lyn said...

Hi Tess-
So kind of you..that pic was amazing..thanks.

Other Mary said...

Oh Lyn this is great. I just love S2 especially, but the whole thing is outstanding!

Unknown said...

I loved this quizzical look at the end of days, Lyn. The efforts by few for a grasp at life.... to hold on. Remarkable vision. Thank you for sharing.

kaykuala said...

time is a click, nothing more, and a name engraved on a stone is all there is? Born and died, a box of days, laid in the earth

A measure of demise cleverly narrated. Nicely Lyn!

Hank

Wayne said...

I like where you wnet with this....nicely done

Lyn said...

Hi Other Mary-
Thanks, I did really try to have this make sense!

Lyn said...

Hi Linda-
I did enjoy the extremes, the saint's point of view, the pragmatist's...thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi kaykuala-
For me, it's all about the writing..I can take any point of view...shhhh! Thanks, Hank...

Lyn said...

Hi Wayne-
I appreciate that..it was a trip! Thank you so much!

Berowne said...

"Reach through the burn for the brass ring."
Powerfull stuff...

Carrie Van Horn said...

A stunning and beautiful write Lyn! I love love love this one!

Lyn said...

Hi Berowne-
Thanks so much...Lucky to have the opportunity!

Lyn said...

Hi Carrie-
You are most kind..thanks so much!

Unknown said...

Great take on the prompt! You are so right - it would be sad if we were just ticking away days, nothing more!

Lyn said...

Hi Robyn-
I share your point of view! thanks..

Laurie Kolp said...

Love this: time is a click.

Silent Otto said...

Wow , Lyn ,this is truly inspired , and i think your right, it wont be good for us if heavens eye opens and finds only darkness, as we could well end up a derelict vampire planet , floating endlessly through time and space on some long forgotten frequency of manifestation, like countless others that failed to make the jump, until there is othing left. Cheery fellow arent i ?. I always enjoy your work

Brian Miller said...

a box of days, laid in the earth...wow...love the way you put that...is that all there is...is there more...we may one day find out...smiles...really tight little piece you put together...

Lyn said...

Hi Laurie-
Now that we've got that solved!!Thanks so much...

Lyn said...

Hi Kutamun-
Always appreciate your insight..thanks!

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
I'm trying to remember a novella/short story, by Milan Kundera, about a very abstract journey of a soul..It always felt "right" to me...What's the name..still "seeing" it! Thanks, Brian, as always..

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