Ophelia/ Odilon Redon
THANK YOU, Tess, for Magpie Tales.
SINKING
Remain, lift me.
Keep me from sinking
into a gothic tragedy.
I lunge for your words,
like souls dive for spirit,
splitting time in half,
sinking and rising,
flirting with calamity.
I wait for the current
to flush my heart
clean of yearning.
Courage breaks
and damsels sink.
Not under yet.
Rescue me.
Copyright/ all rights reserved/ 2012
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19 comments:
i wait for the current to flush my heart...nice line...and i like that you havent given up yet...but...hope rescue makes it in time...
The second stanza is my favorite. There is so much to it, I keep rereading. Excellent take on the picture.
very good, love the water elements throughout
Hi Brian..
Thank you..love it when some lines pop up...now where did that come from?
Hi Brenda-
So happy you like this...enjoyed your comment...thanks!
Hi awakenedwords-
Thank you...yes, I felt the water immediately!!
Classical story telling, speaking to us all, yet intensely personal...
I knew there was water, and went elsewhere! glad you played with it though- thanks.
Very good writing; quite moving...
waiting for the current to flush your heart, that's like waiting for the moon, and the cycles to just flush us
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Hi Rick-
Thank you for your generous words!
Hi izzy-
So much in the Prompts just seems to happen..I follow!!
Hi Berowne-
Thanks so much for your kind words!
Hi zongrik-
We get these images, don't we, and it's all for poetry..a good world to dwell in..thanks!!
Sounds like hes there for you any time you need him , Lyn .
Love the second stanza and love it all really!
Anna :o]
Hi Kutamun-
One would hope so! Thanks so much..
Hi hyperCRYPTICal-
Really nice comment..thank you!
So desperate one feels like diving in, life jacket or no! Lovely choice of words.
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