A VERY IMPORTANT APPLE
You mean that by my taking a bite,
there's no turning back,
I've shaped the sin of the world?
Who would have thought
this succulent fruit,
whose sap has trickled down my chin,
a syrupy residue laced
with purity, and oozing
towards my bosom,
would mark me
as the first offender?
Can it be, Mr.S,
the bite you enticed me to nibble,
plunged creation into vanity,
where all's over at the start,
all's conceit, and
I'm doomed
to a life of repentance?
A simple desire for a treat
did all that, you say?
Not fair, not fair!
I didn't know you'd change an apple
into a metaphor.
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Thank you to Willow for another challenging Prompt!! Please check all the other responders to her Magpie Tales.
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38 comments:
This was a juicy, yummy piece of work ... I loved it!
The BEST!
fabulous magging.
A clever, witty and strikingly profound magpie, Lyn. Of course, there is often a cross-over between symbolism and literalism, a nuance too many refuse to acknowledge.
Hi Helen-
So glad you liked it..thank you!!
Hi Everyday Goddess-
Wow..thanks! The Mags are a great challenge, right?
Hi Sam-
Leave it to you, Sam, to say something so flattering..I hardly know myself..thanks!!!
changing an apple into a metaphor isn't fair! I do agree ;)
nice Magpie.
Hi Gabriela-
Definitely not fair..trapped again!!..thanks for visiting...
I so like your writing...wonderful play of thoughts and deeds such as a simple bite of apple! Apples dipped in honey this week has for me, the definition of "A sweet New Year" more than a juicy snack...love the metaphors.
Hi Mary Ann-
I'm so grateful for your lovely thoughts..Apple and honey, suddenly have a real craving!!A Sweet New Year to you!!
totally nailed it! xxo
Hi Jeane-
Thanks, it was an interesting Prompt!
and that is his wickedness...to appease us and leave us...our hands empty but the metaphors...smiles. nice mag!
Hi Brian-
Sooo..appease and leave..and we have to sort it out, for sure..
life on earth, huh? But our lesson, perhaps...laugh and detach!!
Thanks..
I may have eaten the apple, but you planted the seed, that grew into the tree, which bore this wonderful fruit...
Hi Jen-
Very interesting comment..thank you!
It was all the apple's fault anyway.
Hi spacedlaw-
Sweetness and beauty, hmm..that is enticing!!
Thanks for coming by..
Oh, gosh, what a clever weaving in of vanity and fair. Wonderful, Lyn!!
Hi Willow-
Hat's off to you, m'dear. You have awakened the poetry bug,.
Someday "they" will look back and wonder why so many poems were written in 2010!
It's all Mr S's fault! Curses on him!
Hi steviewren-
Good comment...thanks..why not?
deliciously profound magpie!
Hi Tumblewords-
How kind you are..thank you!
Personally, I don't think there's anything wrong with a little vanity. It's the *tricking* part that I'm not happy with. Brilliant magpie, Lyn.
This was such a naughty and humourous piece. Loved it. And you have watched 'Waltz with Bashir'. Great.
Many thanks for that poem. It's lightened up my day.
Greetings from London.
Hi Angie-
Thanks so much..Yes, I agree we must stay on our toes and not be fooled !!!
Greetings to a Cuban-
Thanks for the comment..and it's a pleasure to follow your reviews!!
Sometimes a train is a train, a tunnel a tunnel, a cigar a cigar. And I will go down fighting the idea that a biblical bite from an apple or apricot is what brought mankind down the proverbial greased slide to sin.
I truly enjoyed the fact that I read something altogether different into your writing, again proving that what the story portends is more the concept of the reader than the writer!
BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN AND EXECUTED!
Hi Dana-
Very interesting comment..theological texts have been an inspiration from the beginning..satire,inquisitions.. hardly a day goes by that I don't exclaim..Oh, God!! Waiting, waiting....
I am so glad you visited my blog and made me come over to read this poem.
It is excellent!
Hi Friko-
It was my pleasure! Thank you so much...
Your two blogs are so full of wisdom and poetry. It feels sacred and sensual to visit them.
Thank you soo for your comment on my WabiSabi blog & welcome to my autumn contest, please be my guest!
Agneta
Hi Agneta-
What an uplifting comment..thank you!
And thanks for inviting me to the autumn poetry site...
Wow...we did have similar ideas going. I love "would mark me as the first offender"! That is truly profound. I was struck, as well, by the Vanity Fair beneath the apple. Very well done! Thanks for stopping by my blog.
Hi Carolina Linthead-
I love coincidense..thanks so much for visiting!
Lots of well-deserved praise, Lyn. You made this pretty sensual too!
Hi Derrick-
Poor Eve...Thank you..this was just plain fun for me..I accept no guilt, in reality!!
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