THE WIND...A Pantoum
I turned around and went out,
mistaking the wind for your voice.
Here I am, I cried.
And I danced in its arms with delight.
Mistaking the wind for your voice,
the breeze started pushing me back,
and I danced in its arms with delight.
Why would I need any more?
The breeze started pushing me back,
a beat surged in my blood.
Why would I need any more
to keep my ardor going forever?
A beat surged in my blood,
I felt your hand in mine
to keep my ardor going forever.
Did you know you were at my side?
I felt your hand in mine,
it's been this way before.
Did you know you were at my side
or has my dream just faded away?
It's been this way before.
Here I am, I cried.
Or has my dream just faded away?
I turned around and went out.
A Pantoum is a poetic form that first appeared in the 15th Century, in Malaysia. It can be of indefinite length and is made up of specific repetition.
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8 comments:
Lovely poetic form, and works so well with this theme of the wind. A real treat to read, Lyn.
Hi Willow-
Thanks so much..I like the form a lot..so much just pops up..but I need a map when I do one!!
I've never read a pantoum before, so this was a treat. As Willow said, the poetic form and the subject matter work together beautifully; the poem is vivid and powerful. My favourite line was, "mistaking the wind for your voice"...such profound and stirring words, Lyn.
Hi Sam-
Thank you, Sam..I really like being guided by a form, every once in a while. I've been at pantoums for a few years...love where it goes!
Hi Lyn,
Sam has chosen the line - and from that point all follows!
Hi Derrick-
Glad you're back, from wherever! And thanks..for me a pantoum is really an experience that practically writes itself, all I have to do is feed it some lines..and wait and see!
lynn,
what a soaring poem,
love your talent!
way to go!
your technique shall be shared.
Hi Jingle-
Thank you...I always like the challenge of a pantoum!
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