Sunday, June 17, 2012

MAGPIE...Prompt #122


                                                        Puddle/ 1952/ M.C. Escher


I THINK A PANTOUM has the right dimension to reflect Escher's angles....thank you, Tess, Magpie Tales.


FACETS

Last dance at the end of the world.
Pull me close, hold me tight.
We U-turn through time,
swan along the footpath.

Pull me close, hold me tight.
I reach to grasp your fingertips.
Swan along the footpath,
splash across a mirror.

I reach to grasp your fingertips,
polished into gleaming facets.
Splash across a mirror,
a kaleidoscope revolving.

Polished into gleaming facets,
we U-turn through time,
a kaleidoscope revolving.
Last dance at the end of the world.


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24 comments:

Brian Miller said...

very nice form...love the repetition and it plays well with the turn through time as it spins itself...swan through the footpath, a great line...the inclusion of the kaleidiscope, nice...dance on...smiles.

Tumblewords: said...

I absolutely love this - a pantoum of perfection!

Linda said...

The topic is sad, the form is brilliantly clever and the play between the prompt and your poem shines, Lyn. Thank you for sharing your pantoum. It is inspired. =D

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
I do like where the form takes me, because after a certain point, the pantoum wins!! Thanks so much...

Lyn said...

Hi Tumblewords-
Thanks so much for your kind words!

Lyn said...

Hi Linda-
I like the similar (abstract) quality of Escher and of pantoums...thank you!

Berowne said...

Very nice poeticizing...

Helen said...

This is Stellar!!! Not an easy form to master ... which you have!

Tess Kincaid said...

Oh I really like the notion of a U-turn through time...nice Lyn...

Lyn said...

Hi Berowne-
Always welcome your kind comments..thanks...

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
I go to this form for something special..thanks so much!

Lyn said...

Hi Tess-
It's the Escher that made me do it!...thank you, again!!

Laurie Kolp said...

Beautiful, Lyn!

Kutamun said...

Awesome,Lyn , ifelt the sense of time and ending looking into this puddle, too . You wove it so well

izzy said...

Neat! great idea and it keeps moving I love that- thanks.

Lyn said...

Hi Kutamun-
Yes, that's some puddle! Thanks a lot!!

Lyn said...

Hi Laurie-
Lovely words...thank you!

Lyn said...

Hi izzy-
A pantoum sort of forces movement...I'm grateful!!

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

awesome write!..

JJRod'z

Lyn said...

Hi JJ-
I appreciate your comment..thanks..sorry to take so long responding...my blog kept disappearing yesterday!! Fingers crossed...

Helena said...

Very pleasing images from this! That last dance doesn't sound so final now - this carries it on beautifully!

Bee's Blog said...

I too love the U turn.

Lyn said...

Hi Helena-
So glad that you feel this way..no finality here!! Thanks..

Lyn said...

Hi Bee's...
Sort of like it myself..thanks!!

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