WIND OF HISTORY/ Jacek Yerka
THANK YOU, Tess, for inspiration, at Magpie Tales.
SYMMETRY
I ran away from symmetry,
the impression of perfection.
I never cared for bits
and pieces
to line up perfectly.
Before I saw you,
my breath was too tranquil.
I slept in my ennui.
Morning surprised me.
Out the door and hell bent.
You baptized me with that name,
blushed my face.
I countered with tall stories,
reddened the rainbow.
You swallowed thunder,
slammed doors,
rearranged scraps,
deepend ruts,
turned the earth.
Our hard breathing
suddenly flowered.
Roses, a lotus,
cherry blossoms,
settled in my folds.
Now that's more like it.
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21 comments:
Swallowed thunder ! great choice and it fits beautifully with the rest-Thanks.
I was going to tell you what I liked best but then I couldn't, any more than a mother can point at a favorite child.
Our hard breathing
suddenly flowered.
Roses, a lotus,
cherry blossoms,
settled in my folds.
Now that's more like it.
ha i rather like the double meaning in that you know...suggestive...smiles...really a finely crafted piece...
Oh, how beautiful this is!
Wow!! What a journey you have taken me on...loved it!
Hugs
SueAnn
Hi izzy-
Thank you for your comment...nice!
Hi Yvonne-
That's a very amazing comment..thank you so much!
Hi Brian-
Yes, this was interesting for me to write..thank you for your insight!
Hi Tumblewords-
Wow! Who could ask for more..thank you!!
Hi SueAnn-
Lovely...so pleased you enjoyed this...thanks!
Congratulations on running away from symmetry. You've done it well...
Hi Berowne-
An Olympic event! Thanks...
Sleeping in ennui ... too many of us live life that way! Great write, Lyn.
Hi Helen-
Thanks for the kind words...
Wow, so what am I getting here? It's... nature, god? An inability to stay dormant and in doing so, a reckless drive for chaotic production and creativity? Like...life just bursts out, no matter how passive it seems -- in it's dormant state?
I love it, whatever it means!
Hi Dori-
Whatever it means! Yes! Sort of chaos better than boredom? Something better than nothing?Thanks!
Mud is so much more interestingly treacherous than made road.
On ya mate
I run from symmetry, too...wonderful poem Lyn...
Hi Kutamun-
You've got a point there..thank you!
Hi Tess-
Keep 'em coming...just trying to keep up with you!! Thanks....
Lovely words. Symmetry was always a bugger for me - being an identical twin...!!
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