Verdun, 1917/ Felix Vallotton
THANK YOU, Tess for Magpie Tales...
ELEVEN ELEVEN
What color dust
have you become?
Did you drink in red
as you were sliced?
Is it soul or skin
that drifts upwards
to add a stain
to the eternal cloth?
I'm the shade of hell,
the mud trench we died in.
You sink into me.
A raven calls the time,
eleven, eleven.
On my back
dead eyes
stare at the azure sky.
Part of forever now,
I'm the blue in the rainbow,
don't search
beyond that
for me.
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20 comments:
Those who finish on the field of battle are the winners.... It is they who have escaped the tumult.
rel
dang...you gave me chills...
I'm the shade of hell,
the mud trench we died in.
You sink into me.
and then the raven calling the time...really well played...
Hi rel-
I guess finishing anywhere is good..interesting..thank you!
Hi Brian-
So glad to read your comment..thank you, Brian.
This is astounding... love the ending.
Hi Laurie-
Thank you so much..very appreciated!
Somber words, thoughtful words ... great piece Lyn!
Hi Helen-
W W 1...always brings up the most haunting visions..thank you..
This is my fave so far! Lyn - I simply love:
'I'm the blue in the rainbow,
don't search beyond that for me.'
Hi Helena-
I sort of hope that's true for me! Thanks so much...
so haunting, its true , what the raven says, it is folly, though perhaps not justice.
The very colors of poignancy. Well done.
Hi Kutamun-
Ah, justice..that's the difficult one! thank you...
Hi ~T~
Thanks so much for your comment, this one haunted me...
"...part of forever now"...poignant and beautiful...
Hi Tess-
Thanks for your kind words...
So many amazing lines here.....love this Lyn!!!
Beautifully written Lyn
"I'm the shade of hell,
the mud trench we died in."
God it must have been hell.
Anna :o]
Hi Carrie-
Thank you..what a time that was!!
Hi hyperCRYPTICal-
Hard to believe they thought this worthwhile! Thank you, Anna...
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