Puddle/ 1952/ M.C. Escher
I THINK A PANTOUM has the right dimension to reflect Escher's angles....thank you, Tess, Magpie Tales.
FACETS
Last dance at the end of the world.
Pull me close, hold me tight.
We U-turn through time,
swan along the footpath.
Pull me close, hold me tight.
I reach to grasp your fingertips.
Swan along the footpath,
splash across a mirror.
I reach to grasp your fingertips,
polished into gleaming facets.
Splash across a mirror,
a kaleidoscope revolving.
Polished into gleaming facets,
we U-turn through time,
a kaleidoscope revolving.
Last dance at the end of the world.
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24 comments:
very nice form...love the repetition and it plays well with the turn through time as it spins itself...swan through the footpath, a great line...the inclusion of the kaleidiscope, nice...dance on...smiles.
I absolutely love this - a pantoum of perfection!
The topic is sad, the form is brilliantly clever and the play between the prompt and your poem shines, Lyn. Thank you for sharing your pantoum. It is inspired. =D
Hi Brian-
I do like where the form takes me, because after a certain point, the pantoum wins!! Thanks so much...
Hi Tumblewords-
Thanks so much for your kind words!
Hi Linda-
I like the similar (abstract) quality of Escher and of pantoums...thank you!
Very nice poeticizing...
This is Stellar!!! Not an easy form to master ... which you have!
Oh I really like the notion of a U-turn through time...nice Lyn...
Hi Berowne-
Always welcome your kind comments..thanks...
Hi Helen-
I go to this form for something special..thanks so much!
Hi Tess-
It's the Escher that made me do it!...thank you, again!!
Beautiful, Lyn!
Awesome,Lyn , ifelt the sense of time and ending looking into this puddle, too . You wove it so well
Neat! great idea and it keeps moving I love that- thanks.
Hi Kutamun-
Yes, that's some puddle! Thanks a lot!!
Hi Laurie-
Lovely words...thank you!
Hi izzy-
A pantoum sort of forces movement...I'm grateful!!
awesome write!..
JJRod'z
Hi JJ-
I appreciate your comment..thanks..sorry to take so long responding...my blog kept disappearing yesterday!! Fingers crossed...
Very pleasing images from this! That last dance doesn't sound so final now - this carries it on beautifully!
I too love the U turn.
Hi Helena-
So glad that you feel this way..no finality here!! Thanks..
Hi Bee's...
Sort of like it myself..thanks!!
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