River Irwell/ R.A.D. Stainforth
Lovely river...thank you Tess for the inspiration...Magpie Tales...
AFLOAT
Ashes, spilled last week,
float by,
recalling some one's grief.
In those shadows
along the green shore,
a breath of darkness,
the black wind itself,
pushes a wave to break
and wash me downstream.
A ripple fondles your skin.
I lick blue points of chill
from your arms,
and choose to float
within your shell,
a model Venus
rising in your river,
waiting to be buoyant.
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28 comments:
nice...great opening on the ashes....and then the venus rising in the end as well...a bit of resurrection...i lick blue points...great intimacy in that stanza...
I love that the ashes are moving downstream. This is quite lovely.
Hi Brian-
Back again.. and so happy to hear from you..thanks so much!
Hi Mimi-
These images just floated to me..thank you so much for your kind words!
Your words flow like the river! I also really like your header photo, how ever you did it!
This is quite lovely.
=)
Hi Karen-
Thank you...the header is just a reversed photo/ positive to negative. Easy, otherwise I couldn't do it!!
Hi Sue-
Thanks for your kind words..
I love the rising of Venus at the end...beautiful write Lyn...
Hi Tess-
Thank you..it was a very interesting prompt..surprised myself..
Floating ashes and waiting for buoyancy - finely defined...
This stands out to me, although the entire piece is stunning-
A ripple fondles your skin.
I lick blue points of chill
from your arms,
and choose to float
within your shell
lovely...
how the river flowing
washes imagination to
it's shores,
rel
I love the feeling of comforting love that your poem evokes. There is a soft caress and a lovely flow the phrasing in your work. Thank you for sharing this, Lyn.
Hi Tumblewords-
Thanks for your kind response!
Hi Laurie-
This was an interesting one to tackle..thanks so much!
Hi rel-
Thank goodness for the flow of imagination!
Hi Linda-
What a lovely thing to say..so glad to share..
a lot of sexy hot images in this
Gosh, this is lovely. Well done.
Fine writing...
Hope does float....this is beautiful Lyn!
Hi zongrik-
I surprised myself..thanks!!
Hi Berowne-
That means a lot...thank you...
Hi thingy-
So glad you liked it..thanks so much!
Hi Carrie-
Thank you..and it does indeed float!
I'm one of the ones recalling past grief for Mother's Day. ...and recalling past sweetness, joy and love too. All at once at some moments.
Hi Al One-
It's all part of life, it seems..thanks for stopping by!
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