THE SNAKE CHARMER/ Henri Rousseau. 1907
WHAT A CHARMING Painting...Magpie/ Prompt #83, thanks for the inspiration, Tess!
THE EDEN CHRONICLES
No shadow under you,
no mirror image of your outline,
red eyes Morse code a warning
that seems an enticement,
an enticement that seems a warning.
Prickles on my neck
as you slither by
to the purr of the clarion.
Belly scraping rock bottom,
barnacles, scum,
a piquant soup.
The sinister hand stirs, beckons,
a whisper hisses in passing...
"She's to blame,
herewith in mud forever"...
copyright/ all rights reserved/ 2011
34 comments:
I love the notion of eyes Morse coding! Nice, Lyn.
Oh man, this one really hits ya on the second read. Yep, blame the female, again, she's the downfall of the universe. Another beauty, Ms. Poetess!
Hi Tess-
So glad you enjoyed this..couldn't wait to jump right in!!
Hi Hartley-
Just blown away by your comment..thank you so much!!
The whole piece sings...or hisses! Love it all!
Why does no one blame the snake?
I loved your poem. It made me think and smile.
I gave it the good old college try ... choosing which stanza was my favorite. No contest, they were all great!
Yes, yes, love this one - captures the pure essense of the prompt.
That last line is chilling. Great write, Lyn.
smiles. we all look for someone to blame...to take responsibility from our hands for our choices...whetherit be the opposite gender or a hapless snakewho happens to be slithering by...
Ahh... this begs for rereading. I love it... especially the 2nd and 3rd stanzas.
Hi Blue Sky..
I like that it hisses..thank you!!
Hi Sean-
I like the effect this had on you...smiling and thinking!! thanks...
Hi Helen-
I deeply appreciate your comment..thanks so much...
Hi 120 Socks-
When I looked at this painting..so much was hidden..and then revealed..but that's poetry for you! Thank you...
Hi thingy-
I think the last line is history..enjoyed your comment..thanks!
Hi Brian-
It's fun to blame myth, to share the world with snakes..It's necessary not to let the snakes have all the fun though...thank you, always...
Hi Laurie-
So pleased that you like this..I really sort of "caught" it!! Thanks...
Wonderfully well done, Lyn.
— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
Hi Kay-
Thank you so much..I appreciate your kind words..
Alluring words!
I read it again for the sheer joy to enjoy the weave of wordplay:)
I bet it's all lies, it was Adam that put her up to it, she simply wanted to change the subject from endless discussions about gardening ...
fine conjuring Lyn
Hi Erratic Thoughts-
Lovely thing to say..I thank you!
Hi Isabel-
Love your imagination, and your scenario...thank you!
It sure repays a second and third read. Very good Magpie.
Great write Lyn
Anna o]
The red eyes morse coding is a lovely image.
Hi Trellissimo-
I'm flattered to hear that..thank you so much!!
Hi hyperCRYPTICal-
Thank you Anna, very nice!!
Hi Doctor FTSE-
I'm sort of glad that this phrase came up for me...thank you...
fantastic flow.
your words are tasty,
they make readers want for more.
Hi Cello Strings-
Very nice to hear from you...lovely comment..thanks!!
Hi Steve-
Thank you so much!
I resisted much the reference to Eden! You make it work very nicely. Lovely poem.
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