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THANK YOU WILLOW, for the invitation to join your Magpie Tales. Always looking for inspiration...what could be better than this mass creativity! Please continue to drop your ideas like crumbs in the forest...I'll follow you anywhere!
SECRETS
I poured my whispers
into the dim luster of the pitcher,
my lips almost kissing the rim.
The cold taste of pewter
on my tongue,
seemed like a little bite.
The game I played
spoke only secrets
into the vessel.
When I looked within
I saw a tiny storm
picking up speed,
and made haste
to tell more of my tale.
The pitcher gathered my words,
and entwined them
with the pale tulips
leaning on the edge.
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34 comments:
Very impressive -- glad I had an opportunity to read it.
I went more for humor (not sure that was a good idea). :-)
Hi Berowne-
Thanks so much..
Humor?..always a good idea..I usually go for that first, but sometimes I get into a "serious" mood..
Wonderful poem! I think this Magpie Tales will be bring out many wonderful writers.
Hi Jane-
How nice! Thanks..I need all the help I can get.
I found this quite lovely. What fun we are going to have with Willow's meme!
So good, so good. I like how you created this metaphor and then just rode it perfectly to the end. So nicely rendered, I felt as if I was there. Bravo!
A vessel of secrets and storms. I love this!! Mysterious and beautiful, Lyn.
Hi RNSANE-
Thank you..I think this is a very good idea! Leave it to Willow!
Hi Gerry-
Wow, I'm so appreciative of your comment! Thank you, thank you!!
Nice response -- I'm enjoying the different takes on the prompt.
Hi Willow-
Thank you, my friend..I toast you with the best champagne!! Great idea...
Hi Vicki-
Thanks..so many found Willow's prompt to be inspirational! I can't wait to check them all!!
Lovely.
Hi spacedlaw-
Thank you!!! I had fun...
to A Brush
Thank you for visiting..I looked in on your site..so good!
Bittersweet tale this pitcher evoked. Very visually and emotionally engaging. Well done.
I've missed your poetry, Lyn and this one is so lovely and evocative and so you see, this is why I've missed it.
"The cold taste of pewter on my tongue"... nice!
Kat
those whispers & secrets will get you every time...wonderfuly done.
Hi Rhonda-
Thank you so much! I really enjoyed having the pitcher as my companion!
Hi Kat-
I had fun with this one..try to catch your poetry all the time! thanks!
Hi Jen-
Please wander by anytime..it's so good to expand one's contacts! Thank you so much...
Hi Brian-
Thanks for stopping by..The secrets are safe!!
I like how you turned the creamery from a simple vessel to a vessel of secrets. "The game I played/ spoke only secrets/ into the vessel" are incredibly lovely lines.
Hi Evening Light-
Never know where it's going when I start.....Thank you for your very kind words!
Beautiful! I love the imagery.
Beautiful poem. I love the image of the pitcher gathering your words and entwining them with the tulips.
Hi CatLady-
I so appreciate the visit..thank you !!
Hi PattyF-
Thank you...I had this image of 2 lips and tulips, playing their roles!
There is beautiful imagery in this poem .I also like the little storm brewing, the tulips and the taste of the pewter.Did you know that the lead content in pewter is high
and can cause insanity.Of course I found this out too late!
Hi rall...
Too late for me too..now I know why I was always being told to"get the lead out."
And thanks for the very kind words!
Already like your creative and inventive writing so this is "Chocolate" on top with this prompt! Great line "cold taste of pewter on my tongue"
Hi Mary Ann-
Thank you..I did like that taste too!! Pewter/chocolate..yum!!
Beautiful and deeply moving, thanks for sharing.
Hi Sun Dance Hill-
Thank you for visiting and your kind words!
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