Sunday, February 17, 2013

MAGPIE...Prompt #156

  
                                                   WIND OF HISTORY/ Jacek Yerka


THANK YOU, Tess, for inspiration, at Magpie Tales. 


SYMMETRY

I ran away from symmetry,
the impression of perfection.
I never cared for bits
and pieces
to line up perfectly.

Before I saw you,
my breath was too tranquil.
I slept in my ennui.

Morning surprised me.
Out the door and hell bent.

You baptized me with that name,
blushed my face.
I countered with tall stories,
reddened the rainbow.

You swallowed thunder,
slammed doors,
rearranged scraps,
deepend ruts,
turned the earth.

Our hard breathing
suddenly flowered.
Roses, a lotus,
cherry blossoms,
settled in my folds.
Now that's more like it.


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21 comments:

izzy said...

Swallowed thunder ! great choice and it fits beautifully with the rest-Thanks.

Yvonne Osborne said...

I was going to tell you what I liked best but then I couldn't, any more than a mother can point at a favorite child.

Brian Miller said...

Our hard breathing
suddenly flowered.
Roses, a lotus,
cherry blossoms,
settled in my folds.
Now that's more like it.

ha i rather like the double meaning in that you know...suggestive...smiles...really a finely crafted piece...

Tumblewords: said...

Oh, how beautiful this is!

Sueann said...

Wow!! What a journey you have taken me on...loved it!
Hugs
SueAnn

Lyn said...

Hi izzy-
Thank you for your comment...nice!

Lyn said...

Hi Yvonne-
That's a very amazing comment..thank you so much!

Lyn said...

Hi Brian-
Yes, this was interesting for me to write..thank you for your insight!

Lyn said...

Hi Tumblewords-
Wow! Who could ask for more..thank you!!

Lyn said...

Hi SueAnn-
Lovely...so pleased you enjoyed this...thanks!

Berowne said...

Congratulations on running away from symmetry. You've done it well...

Lyn said...

Hi Berowne-
An Olympic event! Thanks...

Helen said...

Sleeping in ennui ... too many of us live life that way! Great write, Lyn.

Lyn said...

Hi Helen-
Thanks for the kind words...

Dori said...

Wow, so what am I getting here? It's... nature, god? An inability to stay dormant and in doing so, a reckless drive for chaotic production and creativity? Like...life just bursts out, no matter how passive it seems -- in it's dormant state?
I love it, whatever it means!

Lyn said...

Hi Dori-
Whatever it means! Yes! Sort of chaos better than boredom? Something better than nothing?Thanks!

Silent Otto said...

Mud is so much more interestingly treacherous than made road.
On ya mate

Tess Kincaid said...

I run from symmetry, too...wonderful poem Lyn...

Lyn said...

Hi Kutamun-
You've got a point there..thank you!

Lyn said...

Hi Tess-
Keep 'em coming...just trying to keep up with you!! Thanks....

Helena said...

Lovely words. Symmetry was always a bugger for me - being an identical twin...!!

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