Lunch/ George Tooker/ 1964
AN INSPIRATION for this week's Magpie Tales from Tess Kincaid.
SAY SOMETHING
Looking for a cuppa Joe,
I came across a resistant morning.
The gush of the weather
drove me indoors.
Neon flashed: EATS.
I made myself diaphanous,
the better to pick and choose
floating wisdom.
My sixth sense tingled
from sundry communiques.
Under my breath I commanded,
chew that last crumb,
brush a bitten lip,
wonder about tonight's
Blue Plate Special.
Are you lonely today?
Say something to me.
The coffee's cold,
no time for a refill.
The weather has changed,
look out the window.
You don't even know.
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30 comments:
I knew this prompt would produce some gems from the community :]
Are you lonely today?
Say something to me.
The coffee's cold,
no time for a refill.
The weather has changed,
look out the window.
You don't even know.
Great lines, a magpie tale carries humanity and caring nature.
well done.
Hi Mike-
This painting was inspirational, no doubt...thanks!!
Hi Cello Strings-
Thanks so much for your generous words!
Your language fits the atmosphere - nicely done.
Hi DCW-
That's all I wanted to do..thanks for noticing!!
Making oneself diaphanous - love that line / image. Well done, Lyn.
atmosphere....spot on
there is a great disconnection in teh pic that is conveyed in your words very well...it is a bit disjointed at times which also fits well with the picture...
Hi Helen-
Thank you..I think this painting has a magic about it...
Hi Suz-
Yes, if ever a painting ever had atmosphere...thanks!
Hi Brian-
I so felt the alienation..it seemed to me that nothing could be connected...thank you so much...right!!
You so captured the dissonance in this painting. Great!
An amazing take Lyn....love it!!
Hi Tumblewords-
Thanks for your comment..that painting...really did it..
Hi Carrie-
So pleased that you enjoyed this..thank you!
So much depth to this, Lyn.
Hi Laurie-
Thank you..I've noticed that this pic has brought out a lot of depth..
Lots of great lines here, I like the 'gush of weather' and making yourself 'diaphanous'
Always trust that sixth sense!
Hi Other Mary-
Absolutely...the 6th sense! Appreciate your comment...thanks..
And you certainly captured the atmosphere. Well done. : )
Hi thingy-
Thanks...I found this to be very intriguing..
Excellent, sensitive write.
Hi Trellissimo-
I really appreciate your comment...thanks so much!
Lynn,
I'm taking a bye this week to finish some course work but wanted to see your take on this.
Your poem reflects the the dissonent atmosphere among the sameness. Everybody is the same, even the black man, but no one takes time to notice.
rel
Hi Rel-
Thanks for stoppong by and good luck with projects! I sort of got the existential who-ha's when I saw this painting..
I love your 'resistant morning'
An excellent write that captures the atmosphere perfectly.
Anna :o]
Hi Isabel-
There were some many ideas tucked away in this painting..thank you...
Hi HyperCRYPTICal-
Like others, this was very strong for me..thanks, Anna..
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