TODAY WE ARE ASKED by Poetry Potluck #23, to choose from the topics, Our Home, Temple, Sanctum.
Somehow, Sanctum caught my eye...hope you enjoy!
SANCTUM FOR RENT
Looking for a place
to hang my sins out to dry,
quiet enough to work
on my peace of mind.
A place to rinse
and spin my karma,
see the Moon
from my window,
snatch it when
it kisses me.
Is it futile to ask
for a dazzling altar,
a place for a cast-out
friend to pray?
Also, I'd like a holy cup
that sings,
when I stir up
some courage,
and a door
easily opened
to shepherds,
leading their flock.
How about
some cross ventilation,
a cool breeze
to carry
my words aloft,
when I ask,
have I been saved?
Absolute necessity:
ability to break
the lease
at a moment's notice.
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30 comments:
Slick write! If only there was such a rental available!
I like how you mix the quest for spiritual home with thee search for a house. More people should shop based on that.
Hi abthomas-
Thanks so much..sometimes it seems to be the right place..but, then the escape clause!!!
Hi brennanbogert-
There should be such a place..within! Thank you for visiting..
I like a holy cup that sings too! Wow to your imagination! :)
great imagery here. congrats . loved all the things u asked for.in such an imaginative way.
Looking for a place to hang my sins out to dry is an awesome line.
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well written...
deep in meaning.. nice ! my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/04/metamorphosis/
Hi bendedspoon-
Glad to hear from you...thanks for the comment!
Hi Butterflies....
My thanks to you...I had fun doing this one!
Hi Tim-
Still looking..thanks for dropping by...
Hi Sam-
Thanks for your comment!!
Hi fiveloaf-
Appreciate your comment..can't wait to read yours!!
I love that you left the "back door" open so that if it wasn't up to your standard, you have the option to break the lease!
Hi Jane-
Thanks..one thing absolutely certain about me..I like to know where the exit is!!
Is this the ghost clause?
Loved this. : )
Hi thingy-
We should all have one! Thanks so much...
That last group of lines is great!
I loved it all, a light touch throughout.
Hi Jessica-
So pleased to hear from you..thanks so much!
Looking for a place
to hang my sins out to dry,
quiet enough to work
on my peace of mind...
your words are stunning, brilliant poetry.
you rock.
A++
Stunning poetry, Lyn. The images are so well crafted.
Hi Jingle-
All is done because of your efforts..thanks so much for what you do!
Hi liv2write2day-
It was so interesting to do..thank you!!
Make sure you read the lease for sure! Very original, and fun read.
Yes! Sounds ideal. I am lucky to inhabit nearly such a place. Blessed, no?
Hi azfree-
Thanks for visiting, and the very nice comment!
Hi Kim-
How lucky you are..blessed, indeed..I too find myself there, from time to time!!
You must have been one of the good ones and pre-qualified. Sanctum for Rent..a very clever poem. A very nice blend of being timid and bold, physical and spiritual. Thanks for sharing.
Hi Dan-
That's a good one..prequalified!All those traits...me! Thank you...
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