The Goddess Nukua
Right up my alley: A choice of Cartoons, Sci-Fi, or Super Powers! All for this week's Poetry Potluck #24. I think my choice sort of overlapped..more fun..and I decided to do a Pantoum. It just seems to offer that spaced-out quality that I was looking for..so enjoy and please visit all the other contributors for a treat.
FREAK
On a night of lengthy shadows
I slipped away to Earth.
Now my heart has a dream of longing
on the rouged steppes of Mars.
I slipped away to Earth.
I look like any other flying maiden
on the rouged steppes of Mars.
No doubt on Earth I'm just a freak.
I look like any other flying maiden
who sheds her snakey skin.
No doubt on Earth I'm just a freak,
hiding wings you'll never get to see.
Who sheds her snakey skin,
waiting for the light that says return,
hiding wings you'll never get to see.
You're missing the chance to know me.
Waiting for the light that says return.
Now my heart has a dream of longing.
You're missing the chance to know me,
on a night of lengthy shadows.
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18 comments:
This offered me a completely original perspective. Thanks!
Hi Kim-
It was an interesting process for me..glad you enjoyed it..thanks!!
freaky but nice-- celabrating our local malaysian pantun haha! here's my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/29/cinderella-for-a-man/
Hi fiveloaf-
I'm always ready to "celebrate" the pantoum (NY spelling!!)...thanks!!
Great imagination there Lyn!
Hi Jane-
Thanks for dropping by..I did like fooling around with this!!
I've been looking down through your entire blog. Very nicely done. Like your whimsical poetry and the pictures you've chosen to go with them.
Hi athursdayschild-
Thanks so much..as they say every picture tells a story..and vice-versa!
That's great! I like the structure of this style. Nice little story too.
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/02/28/sci-fi-hi/
you are so creative.
fiction are all freaking false but freaking fabulous...
love your creativity here.
well done.
A++
Hi Jessica-
Thanks..I love to do a pantoum..never know where it will lead!!
Hi Jingle-
Thanks so much for your comment..fiction can be false, but also true, I think..anyway, fun!!
Let me guess.. are you the alien? Jokes apart- I guess you are an angel!
Beautiful take about the them.. I would definitely want to know more of you- with/without wings!
Love xox
http://oliviasmindlymatters.wordpress.com/2011/02/28/virtuality/
Hi Olivia-
I do at times feel like I'm an alien..who knows..thanks for lovely comments!
Oh wowwww, Lyn!! That was sooo original and fun to read! A bit freaky, yes!! But then that's what made it so much fun!!
Oooohh...snakey skin...super creepy!! But as long as it's all on TV, I am good :)
Hi Kavita-
Thank you...yes, as long as it's just fantasy!
Yes, that was a fun read! You made it so that an alien had human feelings, and that's why we can relate to the character.
I tried writing a pantoum once, but gave up. I'm going to try again. Not today, though. This is a good pantoum!
Hi The Reason...
Thanks..I fancy that creatures feel as we do! And I encourage you to try a pantoum..it sort of takes over when you're writing it!
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