PEEK-A-BOO
Don't think I can't see you
under the rumple of the sheet.
You haven't become invisible
and any creative mystery
you're trying to compose,
locked doors,
sealed windows...
What, vanished?
Your disappearing act
won't be played out with me.
There's your hand
peeking out from under
the white expanse
that I tenderly folded over you
last night.
Are you kidding?
Do you really think
that an unwelcoming bed
will send me scurrying?
Come out,
come out, wherever you are!
I'd know the curve
of your hip, anywhere.
Oh no, buddy boy, I'm here to stay.
Just read the fine print
at the bottom of our document
of eternal bliss.
@copyright/all rights reserved/ 2010
Thanks again to Willow at magpie tales for coming up with such a challenging photo..please check the contributions of the other bloggy participants...more fun!
* Just a word of thanks to my friend and fellow blogger, Derrick at Melrose Musings for having written a most amazing post, A Growing Acquaintance, about my little book of poetry, "Two Ghosts". Quite a thrilling experience for me. In the exchange of our books of poetry, I was fortunate to receive Derrick's excellent, recently published, "Mixed Emotions". All encompassing and original, as his blog always is..a treasure to have.
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50 comments:
The ending blew me away... well done! :)
Hi RA-
Thank you..a little fun with irony!!
The trauma of a tempestuous night or a solitary soliloquy, Lyn?! And thanks for the very kind mention!
Hi Derrick-
You're quite welcome!!
I think she's just a gal who won't take NO for an answer..
hah! Great poem! Loved it!
Wonderful poem, Lyn. You have a rather magical way with words, this was a joy read :)
Hi kathew-
Glad you liked my little bit of fun! Thanks...
Hi Sam-
Thanks for stopping by..you are more than generous, as usual!
oh lyn, your magpie was marvelous! full of honest seaching and heartfelt disappointment, but it was the last line that nailed it for me! come out, come out, wherever you are, indeed!
Hi sheri-
Thanks for your kind words...this gal was just off on a crazy rant..but she was not going to be taken advantage of!!
Really enjoyed your Peek-a-boo Magpie!
Fun. Loved it. Great ending.
Hi C Hummel...
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it..not too serious this time!!
Hi Helen-
Thank you..I enjoyed getting this together..making it fun!!
This one is so fun, and brilliantly written! :-)
The title is perfect!
A cracking poem. And quite spooky, too! :-)
Greetings from London.
Hi Carrie-
Thanks so much..I just wanted to have a little wicked fun!
Greetings to a Cuban-
Thanks as always..sorry if I scared you..was it the peek-a- BOO???
very enjoyable read.
love the way your say it,
I feel like talking or listening to you in person.
Hi jingle-
Thank you..very interesting..I do write the way I speak..love dialog..have written plays..
Lyn
Your writing is charming and eloquent, love your tone and style.
Yes to "eternal bliss". Well written, a joy to read. Actually read it several, enchanting and lyrical.
Thinking about doing this magpie haven't for awhile.
Joanny
love the document of eternal bliss..great take..bkm
Loved it, I could see it playing out. I wonder what is in the fine print, LOL.
Delightfully fun!!
Hi joanny-
You're very kind! I definitely think you should re-join the ranks of magpies again..
Hi bkm-
Thanks...Eternal bliss? Just a very good pre-nup!!!
Hi Eric S-
Thanks for visiting..playing out as the revised "Who's Afraid of Virginia Wolfe"?? Sort of my inspiration!!
Hi Tumblewords-
Fun is good! Thanks..I've got to go there when the iron is hot!!
Loved the playfulness of this one, Lyn. "Come out, come out, wherever you are" is just perfect!
Thank you, Willow..I sort of have to have fun with serious implications!
I wondered how this would end and when I got to it I loved it and smiled!
Christine
Hi Christine-
Thanks for visiting..I guess she thinks she wins..but..maybe not smoothe sailing!!
That was sweet - it sort of took me back to my early-years' marriage....I should have presented a pre-nup back then, too....!
Hi Lena-
Thank you- pre-nups...leave it to a poet to know!!
I thought of a ghost, a fluffy ghost hidden in the sheets.
Loved the lightness and the whimsy.
Hi spacedlaw-
Thank you..I can see that, and who am I to say NO to a ghost?
Hi little hat-
Thanks ...I'm glad it worked..I thought that there would be many more "serious" and brilliant responses!
This could almost follow on from mine.
I like the poem, I like the idea of the hidden one, the playfulness of the interaction and the pleasures to come.
Thank you for visiting my blog.
Hi Friko-
And thanks for your visit!! Not all relationships run smoothly! Will check yours again...
Sometimes the fun is in the hiding. ;)
rel
Hi rel-
Thanks for visiting..
For this guy, I think it is..and then running??
Lyn, I really like the rhythm and energy of your poem. And your use of assonance and consonance as a way of linking lines together..as in "under the rumple of the sheet" and the way "hand" is echoed in the later sounds of "expanse" and "last." I'm always interested in the way the sounds of words reflect their meaning, as they seem to do in those lines.
Anyhoo, I look forward to reading more.
Hi C.L.Smith-
I really appreciate what you have to say. I know that there's a beat in my writing, an internal rhythm that I do hope others discover..so I thank you..I'm always tapping my toes!!
Splendid!
Hi Sandra-
Thanks for visiting!
oh the ending...loved it
and yes it reads outloud very nicely
Hi Suz-
Thanks so much..I like it out loud..gets rid of some agression!!
A great ending.
Hi Jim-
Thanks so much..I did have a bit of fun with this!
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