Welcome to Poetry Potluck #21. This week we are asked for our Aims, Goals, and Ambitions. The name of my poem is about a goal, and I chose to write it in the form of a Pantoum. Hope you will also check out all the other super entries!
I WANT TO MEET YOU
I want to meet you,
now, not someday.
Your touch, like a thin piece of silk
pressing against my face.
Now, not someday..
I can do mischief too.
Pressing against my face,
it felt like a kiss.
I can do mischief too.
I dwell in my mind,
it felt like a kiss.
Who did you last embrace?
I dwell in my mind.
Reminisce with me,
who did you last embrace?
Just a ghost in the fog of dawn?
Reminisce with me.
Your touch, like a thin piece of silk,
just a ghost in the fog of dawn?
I want to meet you.
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27 comments:
Beautiful pantoum...seems an appropriate form for the theme. I love the painting "The Kiss"--perfect illustration.
http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2011/02/07/through-this-dying-jingles-poetry-potluck/
Very enjoyable. I was also shocked because I, too, wrote a French Pantoum. You used the form very well to create tension.
Hi liv2write2day-
Thank you..I love the Klimt..it did just seem to hit the spot!
Hi cloakedmonk-
So glad to hear from you..another Pantoum..great, but I never heard of a French Pantoum??? Must check!!
very lovely-especially with the Klimt.
its spelled as pantun in malaysia my country- you did better than me haha!
thank you for sharing.. here's my potluck..
http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/03/12/broken-home/
Hello Lyn, stopped by to read your Magpie Tales which I enjoyed. Stayed a while to read a few of your lovely poems. Beautiful ... will call again.
..a French Pantoum ..new to me too!
Hi Kathe W.-
Thanks for your kind words and I do love the painting too!!
Hi fiveloaf-
Thanks so much for your input. I started Pantoums (the way I learned in a poetry class)) about 6 yrs. ago, loved it right away, because for me it always uncovers a mystery! I know your spelling must be right!!
Hi Mary-
Welcome..it's so nice to see your lovely words..thank you!!
I have no idea what a pantoum is Lyn, but your poem is lovely!
Hi Jane-
Thanks so much..for an explanation of Pantoum you can check out "Roses Once More/A Pantoum", on my Jan.site, 1/28/11..or, it's a poetic form, the roots of which are Malaysian, starting in the 15th Cent. I really like it!! Hooked!!
Lovely poem and love the picture. It all fits so well.
Hi athursdayschild-
So pleased that you've visited..thanks so much!
your desire of meeting is obvious and powerfully demonstrated, cheers 2 u.
Thanks for the support.
A++
Hi Jingle-
Does she seem a bit desperate? A ittle scary? Hmmm...Thanks for you comment, always!
What magic a Pantoum AND a Klimt. Wonderful!
Hi Louise-
So glad you liked this combo!! Thank you... Something about Klimt...
Wow, it's dense and tangled, and I like it.
Hi Kenny-
Thank you so much...I think the form forces certain results, usually interesting!
Simply lovely, Lyn! I too think it's a great idea to meet the different sides of self once in a while... that way, they'll all be on the same page...
Loved how your words played on my mind... Enjoyed this one!
And now you have inspired me to try writing a French Pantoum.. will take hints from your write here :)
Hi Kavita-
Lovely words, thank you so much!If you want to write a Pantoum(I don't know what a French Pantoum is!!!) you might want to turn to "Roses Once More", Jan. 28, 2011.. where you will find some instructions that might help.
I hope you do try it..you'll be surprised at what happens!!
'I Want To Meet You '
not if I get there first:)
Beautiful pic.One of my favourites.
Feel inspired. Think I'll rush off now and paint a masterpiece.
Hi Rallentanda-
What a divine get-together we'll have..and I do expect nothing less than a masterpiece from you..of course!!
とうとうあのアイドルの流出画像が入手できました！！今年もっともブレイクしたあの女優の下積み時代の動画もあり！是非無料登録して楽しんで下さい
Hi- to the one I can't read...
Hope this is all good..!!
日本最大級の出会えるサイト！デコログ！検索項目も豊富で必ず好みの人と出会える！オフ会なんて毎日の様にあるし登録するだけで出会いが広がるよ
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