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DOWNHILL/ This Way
My trail is empty again.
I take it and dream my way down,
skiing new powder,
going past a few tracks
that cut the hill
on the traverse.
I whisper a caution
now and then
to shadows rushing past me.
I fall and slide against a tree.
The snow goes up my nose
like a line of cocaine.
I sit there and sneeze
little ice balls,
fearing the crack I hear
to be my bones.
But a twig suffers the break.
I rise once more,
lean into the wind,
pretend my increasing speed
is what I wish,
and not the pull of gravity.
I appeal to good fortune;
please, don't send me to oblivion.
@copyright/all rights reserved/2011
Thanks to Tess Kincaid for giving me the opportunity to resurrect a poem I had published in 2008. It's just a bit revised, something I should do more often...and hope for the best!
34 comments:
I love this trip down the slope! I'm with you all the way xxo
lovely Lyn and your photo added perfect for this piece...blessings to you for taking on the cold air...and snow....be safe...bkm
Hi Jeane-
Thanks..then we can stop off for a hot chocolate!!
Hi bkm-
I haven't done the slopes this year, but there's plenty of cold air here this winter..enough for me..thanks!!
When i started reading this poem the first thing i thought of was is there a tree involved and sure enough there was, but i didn't expect the snow goes up my nose like a line of cocaine i call that a very good comparison indeed, very enjoyable once again.
Hi Windsmoke-
Very interesting comment..I thank you!!
I've never been on skis but this took me there!
Well Done
One of the reasons why I like poetry, and especially free verse where rhyme has been cast aside in favour of free-flow, is that it triggers images in my mind that sometimes are unrelated to the poem as such. Yours did just that with these lines:
'I fall and slide against a tree.
The snow goes up my nose
like a line of cocaine.
I sit there and sneeze
little ice balls'
I suddenly thought of Tory Amos's "She's Your Cocaine". Go figure. That was a cracking poem.
Greetings from London.
Hi madamebutterfly-
Thank you..I've always felt that skiing is a perfect experience in many ways..
Greetings to a Cuban-
You are more than kind..such good company! I think poetry, like skiing, should let us wander!!
pretend my increasing speed
is what I wish,
and not the pull of gravity
Like fighting against fate?!
Hi Jinksy-
You've got it exactly...for me anyway. One tries to be in total contol..but...Thanks!!
I've been there - not for a number of years, but an unforgettable descent. Nicely done - vivid and immediate.
Hi Dick-
Thanks..yes, those were the days!Nowadays, more sedentary!!
"...dream my way down" Love-love it.
Hi Tess-
Thank you..skiing was a dream for this city kid..I was free to fly!!
what a unique take.
have fun dreaming your way down the hill.
Hi Jingle-
Thank you..it is a wonderful time!
I'm glad to go with you rather than try it on my own! Nice poem...
Hi Tumblewords-
You're certainly invited to come along!...Thanks!!
Perfect revisit, fits well with the hill, the trip not to oblivion.
Hi Reflections-
Thanks, Reflections...many times I've asked, what am I doing here..being on a mountain!
Very nice piece that glides along smoothly, painting a vivid picture of something I'm far too terrified to even think about doing.:_)
Enjoyed the vicarious thrills.
Thanks for transporting me to your ski slopes, lovely piece with great imagery.
I was on that journey too!
Hi hedgewitch-
Thank you..it's sort of vicarious for me too at this point!
Hi Brigid-
Skiing is one thing that's lived up to my expectations..thanks for dropping by...
Hi 120 Socks-
Glad you could join me!! Thanks..
I've never ever been skiiing, yet I feel like I have after reading your poem.
oh I worried about trees too
But you gave us a thrill ride instead....it is skill not gravity
Hi Sioux-
Thank you..I'm so happy that I could do that and you came along!!
Hi Suz-
Thanks..sometimes the skill seems to slip away!
Downhill.. yeah.. a perfect take..
nothing matters.. and the picture, it fits..
Not sure if you still remember me..
I have been away.. yeah, after finding you with my poem 'Walk with me'.. Do you still remember?
I had a fall, an injured foot and a bad ankle.. am recovering now thus the return..
See you around, yeah?
S.Pike
Hi Krislin Neo-
So glad you're back..no skiing for you..take care and will see around now!!
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