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These lovers
may look aberrant to you.
Well.
Tend to your own ardor,
look at your attachments,
then speak.
The moon takes the sun
into itself in order to shine,
a cool orb absorbs the light,
eats the sun to keep going.
No matter how I pull my body away
I still fuse to you.
Hand elbows knees entwine,
and we pass into some jazz
with a hard beat,
a twist that some call art.
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What a way to start the poetic New Year..thank you Willow, for presenting this enigmatic image!!
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49 comments:
Love this! I think it describes my relationship with my husband fairly well...
Some very memorable lines here
"The moon takes the sun
into itself in order to shine", is one of those lines that ring so true, and seem so obvious, that you can't believe you didn't think of it yourself (of course you did think of it yourself):)
"No matter how I pull my body away
I still fuse to you".
Hand elbows knees entwine". I know that feeling. Who said love was all pleasant, without the supposed to?
Hi Bug-
Thank you! Seems rather normal to me...
I looked at this weeks Prompt and thought "suffocating" - maybe I am not in the right frame of mind!! Enjoyed your piece.
Hi Andreas-
Thanks for your kind words..yes, "good old love"..everything, isn't it? Otherwise why write about it...
very nice... your poem evokes a perfect kind of artful love...
Hi madamebutterfly-
Something funny..I started this poem a few days ago..had no place to go with it till I saw the prompt..strange huh? Thanks!
Hi girldaydreaming-
Thank you..and a bit of attachment!
A brilliant take on the magpie. seeing lovers entwined speaks of a probing heart to me.
Lovely!
Love seems an aberration to observers. You capture their enchantment for each other perfectly. Jazz has a pulsing vitality.
Glad to see you on good mood...
smart take.
keep smiling...
you rock.
Hi Friko-
Thank you so much..I think I saw the lovers right away!
Yes, the pull of one against the other still fused. I like it.
Hi Paul C-
You're so right about the lovers being in a world of their own..I think it was always so..
Hi Jingle-
Thanks for your cheery comment..this was an interesting one to do!
It is a fusion with all its mysteries and it is art!
Hi kaykuala-
Thanks..I'm glad you see things as I do!!
Hi Marilyn-
Glad that you can see what I mean...thank you!!
That describes, to me, the perfect relationship - one that functions, not by dependency, but by the natural flow of things.... like the laws that govern the universe.....like the influence of the moon on the ebb and flow of the tide ..... Such a well-structured and beautiful poem.
Hi Eliza-
It's a very big compliment for me to read your comment, and I thank you..I feel much smarter now..see what you've done!!
yes! we are always in close touch with our sweethearts. Lovely poem.
I love your new header photo-beauiful image and thanks for your kind comments.
Hi kathew-
I love what this prompt brought out in so many..and thanks for your lovely comment!
Just checked comment I left on yours, and it disappeared!! Will go back..
I loved this, the last verse was gorgeous.
Hi Brigid-
I'm so happy to welcome you here..thank you..
I admire your work very much..
Lyn,
Truly, we are all a part of the same whole now aren't we? :)
rel
Hi rel-
Wise words indeed..except we may forget when ego pops up!! Thanks for visiting...
the passion of this is fantastic. very.
Hi Everyday Goddess-
We don't always know what we're giving..so glad for your comment!
an interesting piece, and a beautiful interpretation of it in your poem.
Hi Deedee-
Welcome back..so glad to hear from you again! And thanks for the lovely comment..
Love the lines, 'the moon takes the sun into itself in order to shine'... so true of a solid relationship and with art. Well done.
Hi Reflections-
Thanks for the lovely comment..the poem just seemed to weave itself for me!
A great interpretation of the image, Lyn! I particularly like the first stanza's admonition!
Hi Derrick-
It was just a little lecture to start with! This whole thing was odd because I did part of the poem before I saw the image and then the Prompt nailed it for me....synchronisity!
I really like this!
Hi Martin-
I'm so pleased with your comment..thank you for visiting!
A fine take on passionate love reinforced with some memorable imagery.
Hi Dick Jones-
I'm so glad you dropped by, and I do like your comment!
Well interpreted prompt picture, beautifully expressed in your short poem.
Hi Nanka-
I really appreciate your visit and enjoyed your words..thanks!!
This is a very well written piece and a thoughtful interpretation of the prompt.
a cool orb absorbs the light
Cool? That's just like me!
Hi Mrs. Trellis-
I just knew you were cool!..always thanks for charming comments...
Hi Doctor FTSE-
This turned out to be an interesting challenge..so glad that you liked it..thanks..
Tend to your own ardor
My sentiments exactly!
Hi Mrs.Trellis-
I do believe we tend to tell others how to conduct their affairs!! No, no...
So intriguing! You have some really powerful imagery here. :)
Hi Suko-
Thanks for visiting..poetry does lead us to interesting places!!
This is a great read - love it. Excellent take on the prompt with some pretty amazing lines.
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