Sunday, March 24, 2013

MAGPIE...Prompt #161


                                          Not to be Reproduced, 1937/ Rene Magritte


THANK YOU, Tess at MAGPIE TALES...


TO PLAY

The part you played,
the glide towards dawn,
a wild card, face down,
every hair in place.

All the unknowns of you
take the shape of smoke.
What's in your memory
that you want to mask?

My pool of tears,
they dry to flakes.
Yet the pathway is still
a mesmeric zigzag.

Winning, losing,
every dream
takes a bite out of me.

Your image is all you risk.
I'll call you,
don't call me.


Copyright/ all rights reserved/ 2013

            Hoppy Birday to me!!!  3/22...Aries, what else?

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23 comments:

  1. Gerry@ Strummed WordsMarch 25, 2013 at 9:44 AM

    Sensitive yet probing. Nice one!

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  2. HelenMarch 25, 2013 at 12:27 PM

    Love the twist in your last two lines!

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  3. LynMarch 25, 2013 at 12:43 PM

    Hi Gerry-
    I liked that one could really dive into this one!! Thanks...

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  4. LynMarch 25, 2013 at 12:45 PM

    Hi Helen-
    Reminded me of my ex! hmmm...thanks!

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  5. Kathe W.March 25, 2013 at 1:49 PM

    love the ending! I have said those very words!

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  6. LynMarch 25, 2013 at 2:27 PM

    Hi Kathe W-
    I think we're legion! Thank you so much!

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  7. izzyMarch 25, 2013 at 2:37 PM

    Unknowns and smoke are problematic!
    thanks-

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  8. LynMarch 25, 2013 at 3:53 PM

    Hi izzy-
    Good comment..thank you!

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  9. HelenaMarch 25, 2013 at 9:25 PM

    Pleasantly penned. I love the thought of those flaky tears!

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  10. Tumblewords:March 26, 2013 at 12:36 AM

    Yes. Of course. :)A great read!

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  11. ~T~March 26, 2013 at 12:39 AM

    A "mesmeric zigzag" of a poem. Well done!

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  12. Dave KingMarch 26, 2013 at 7:18 AM

    What an original response to the prompt! A great read.

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  13. Brian MillerMarch 26, 2013 at 7:50 AM

    nice...love the takes a bite out of me..acknowledges how the unwillingness to share affects all those around...the unwillingness to let anyone in....

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  14. LynMarch 26, 2013 at 8:31 AM

    Hi Helena-
    Thanks so much for your insight!

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  15. LynMarch 26, 2013 at 8:33 AM

    Hi Tumblewords-
    "Great" is good!! Thank you so much...

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  16. LynMarch 26, 2013 at 8:36 AM

    Hi ~T~
    Thank you..it was interesting to do!

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  17. LynMarch 26, 2013 at 8:38 AM

    Hi Dave-
    Love your comment (of course!)..thanks so much...

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  18. LynMarch 26, 2013 at 8:42 AM

    Hi Brian-
    Sometimes when I write I need others to show me what I've written...thanks!

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  19. Susan AndersonMarch 26, 2013 at 12:20 PM

    I like this line best of all...

    Your image is all you risk.

    =)

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  20. Silent Otto March 28, 2013 at 7:54 AM

    Hi Lyn , very enchanting , Quixotic . Happy birthday , ! Im a cold calculating libran

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  21. LynMarch 28, 2013 at 8:55 AM

    Hi Sue-
    Thanks for your comment..I like your choice!!

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  22. LynMarch 28, 2013 at 8:57 AM

    Hi Kutamun-
    Thank you...Libra/ Aries, a very good balance!!

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  23. Little NellMarch 28, 2013 at 2:32 PM

    All smoke and mirrors to protect the image - very clever!

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