Sunday, May 6, 2012

MAGPIE...Prompt #116


                                       
                                              River Irwell/ R.A.D. Stainforth

Lovely river...thank you Tess for the inspiration...Magpie Tales...


AFLOAT

Ashes, spilled last week,
float by,
recalling some one's grief.

In those shadows
along the green shore,
a breath of darkness,
the black wind itself,
pushes a wave to break
and wash me downstream.

A ripple fondles your skin.
I lick blue points of chill
from your arms,

and choose to float
within your shell,

a model Venus
rising in your river,
waiting to be buoyant.


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28 comments:

  1. Brian MillerMay 6, 2012 at 6:13 PM

    nice...great opening on the ashes....and then the venus rising in the end as well...a bit of resurrection...i lick blue points...great intimacy in that stanza...

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  2. Mimi FoxmortonMay 6, 2012 at 7:01 PM

    I love that the ashes are moving downstream. This is quite lovely.

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  3. LynMay 6, 2012 at 10:45 PM

    Hi Brian-
    Back again.. and so happy to hear from you..thanks so much!

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  4. LynMay 6, 2012 at 10:48 PM

    Hi Mimi-
    These images just floated to me..thank you so much for your kind words!

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  5. 21 WitsMay 7, 2012 at 1:29 AM

    Your words flow like the river! I also really like your header photo, how ever you did it!

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  6. Susan AndersonMay 7, 2012 at 4:07 AM

    This is quite lovely.

    =)

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  7. LynMay 7, 2012 at 7:11 AM

    Hi Karen-
    Thank you...the header is just a reversed photo/ positive to negative. Easy, otherwise I couldn't do it!!

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  8. LynMay 7, 2012 at 7:12 AM

    Hi Sue-
    Thanks for your kind words..

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  9. Tess KincaidMay 7, 2012 at 1:35 PM

    I love the rising of Venus at the end...beautiful write Lyn...

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  10. LynMay 7, 2012 at 3:54 PM

    Hi Tess-
    Thank you..it was a very interesting prompt..surprised myself..

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  11. Tumblewords:May 7, 2012 at 7:39 PM

    Floating ashes and waiting for buoyancy - finely defined...

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  12. Laurie KolpMay 7, 2012 at 10:19 PM

    This stands out to me, although the entire piece is stunning-

    A ripple fondles your skin.
    I lick blue points of chill
    from your arms,

    and choose to float
    within your shell

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  13. relMay 8, 2012 at 4:37 AM

    lovely...
    how the river flowing
    washes imagination to
    it's shores,
    rel

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  14. UnknownMay 8, 2012 at 11:53 AM

    I love the feeling of comforting love that your poem evokes. There is a soft caress and a lovely flow the phrasing in your work. Thank you for sharing this, Lyn.

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  15. LynMay 8, 2012 at 12:41 PM

    Hi Tumblewords-
    Thanks for your kind response!

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  16. LynMay 8, 2012 at 12:43 PM

    Hi Laurie-
    This was an interesting one to tackle..thanks so much!

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  17. LynMay 8, 2012 at 12:44 PM

    Hi rel-
    Thank goodness for the flow of imagination!

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  18. LynMay 8, 2012 at 12:46 PM

    Hi Linda-
    What a lovely thing to say..so glad to share..

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  19. AnonymousMay 8, 2012 at 2:30 PM

    a lot of sexy hot images in this

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  20. MaggieMay 8, 2012 at 3:15 PM

    Gosh, this is lovely. Well done.

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  21. BerowneMay 8, 2012 at 3:19 PM

    Fine writing...

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  22. Carrie Van HornMay 9, 2012 at 11:40 AM

    Hope does float....this is beautiful Lyn!

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  23. LynMay 9, 2012 at 12:10 PM

    Hi zongrik-
    I surprised myself..thanks!!

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  24. LynMay 9, 2012 at 12:11 PM

    Hi Berowne-
    That means a lot...thank you...

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  25. LynMay 9, 2012 at 12:12 PM

    Hi thingy-
    So glad you liked it..thanks so much!

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  26. LynMay 9, 2012 at 12:13 PM

    Hi Carrie-
    Thank you..and it does indeed float!

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  27. Al_OneMay 14, 2012 at 6:19 PM

    I'm one of the ones recalling past grief for Mother's Day. ...and recalling past sweetness, joy and love too. All at once at some moments.

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  28. LynMay 14, 2012 at 7:30 PM

    Hi Al One-
    It's all part of life, it seems..thanks for stopping by!

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