Tuesday, January 4, 2011

MAGPIE/ Prompt #47

                                            Photo/ Willow/ Magpie Tales


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These lovers
may look aberrant to you.
Well.
Tend to your own ardor,
look at your attachments,
then speak.

The moon takes the sun
into itself in order to shine,
a cool orb absorbs the light,
eats the sun to keep going.

No matter how I pull my body away
I still fuse to you.
Hand elbows knees entwine,

and we pass into some jazz
with a hard beat,
a twist that some call art.


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What a way to start the poetic New Year..thank you Willow, for presenting this enigmatic image!!

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49 comments:

  1. The BugJanuary 4, 2011 at 4:04 PM

    Love this! I think it describes my relationship with my husband fairly well...

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  2. AndreasJanuary 4, 2011 at 4:09 PM

    Some very memorable lines here
    "The moon takes the sun
    into itself in order to shine", is one of those lines that ring so true, and seem so obvious, that you can't believe you didn't think of it yourself (of course you did think of it yourself):)

    "No matter how I pull my body away
    I still fuse to you".
    Hand elbows knees entwine". I know that feeling. Who said love was all pleasant, without the supposed to?

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  3. LynJanuary 4, 2011 at 5:08 PM

    Hi Bug-
    Thank you! Seems rather normal to me...

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  4. AnonymousJanuary 4, 2011 at 5:11 PM

    I looked at this weeks Prompt and thought "suffocating" - maybe I am not in the right frame of mind!! Enjoyed your piece.

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  5. LynJanuary 4, 2011 at 5:12 PM

    Hi Andreas-
    Thanks for your kind words..yes, "good old love"..everything, isn't it? Otherwise why write about it...

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  6. girl daydreamingJanuary 4, 2011 at 5:43 PM

    very nice... your poem evokes a perfect kind of artful love...

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  7. LynJanuary 4, 2011 at 6:21 PM

    Hi madamebutterfly-
    Something funny..I started this poem a few days ago..had no place to go with it till I saw the prompt..strange huh? Thanks!

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  8. LynJanuary 4, 2011 at 6:23 PM

    Hi girldaydreaming-
    Thank you..and a bit of attachment!

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  9. FrikoJanuary 4, 2011 at 6:32 PM

    A brilliant take on the magpie. seeing lovers entwined speaks of a probing heart to me.

    Lovely!

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  10. Paul CJanuary 4, 2011 at 7:39 PM

    Love seems an aberration to observers. You capture their enchantment for each other perfectly. Jazz has a pulsing vitality.

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  11. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJanuary 4, 2011 at 7:41 PM

    Glad to see you on good mood...
    smart take.
    keep smiling...

    you rock.

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  12. LynJanuary 4, 2011 at 7:56 PM

    Hi Friko-
    Thank you so much..I think I saw the lovers right away!

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  13. Marilyn & JeffJanuary 4, 2011 at 7:58 PM

    Yes, the pull of one against the other still fused. I like it.

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  14. LynJanuary 4, 2011 at 7:59 PM

    Hi Paul C-
    You're so right about the lovers being in a world of their own..I think it was always so..

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  15. LynJanuary 4, 2011 at 8:04 PM

    Hi Jingle-
    Thanks for your cheery comment..this was an interesting one to do!

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  16. kaykualaJanuary 5, 2011 at 1:09 AM

    It is a fusion with all its mysteries and it is art!

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  17. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 8:12 AM

    Hi kaykuala-
    Thanks..I'm glad you see things as I do!!

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  18. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 8:15 AM

    Hi Marilyn-
    Glad that you can see what I mean...thank you!!

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  19. ElizaJanuary 5, 2011 at 9:28 AM

    That describes, to me, the perfect relationship - one that functions, not by dependency, but by the natural flow of things.... like the laws that govern the universe.....like the influence of the moon on the ebb and flow of the tide ..... Such a well-structured and beautiful poem.

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  20. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 9:50 AM

    Hi Eliza-
    It's a very big compliment for me to read your comment, and I thank you..I feel much smarter now..see what you've done!!

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  21. Kathe W.January 5, 2011 at 9:52 AM

    yes! we are always in close touch with our sweethearts. Lovely poem.
    I love your new header photo-beauiful image and thanks for your kind comments.

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  22. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 10:59 AM

    Hi kathew-
    I love what this prompt brought out in so many..and thanks for your lovely comment!
    Just checked comment I left on yours, and it disappeared!! Will go back..

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  23. Brigid O'ConnorJanuary 5, 2011 at 1:13 PM

    I loved this, the last verse was gorgeous.

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  24. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 2:56 PM

    Hi Brigid-
    I'm so happy to welcome you here..thank you..
    I admire your work very much..

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  25. relJanuary 5, 2011 at 6:04 PM

    Lyn,
    Truly, we are all a part of the same whole now aren't we? :)
    rel

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  26. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 6:45 PM

    Hi rel-
    Wise words indeed..except we may forget when ego pops up!! Thanks for visiting...

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  27. Everyday GoddessJanuary 5, 2011 at 7:08 PM

    the passion of this is fantastic. very.

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  28. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 8:30 PM

    Hi Everyday Goddess-
    We don't always know what we're giving..so glad for your comment!

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  29. DeedeeJanuary 5, 2011 at 10:02 PM

    an interesting piece, and a beautiful interpretation of it in your poem.

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  30. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 11:24 PM

    Hi Deedee-
    Welcome back..so glad to hear from you again! And thanks for the lovely comment..

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  31. ReflectionsJanuary 5, 2011 at 11:37 PM

    Love the lines, 'the moon takes the sun into itself in order to shine'... so true of a solid relationship and with art. Well done.

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  32. LynJanuary 6, 2011 at 8:29 AM

    Hi Reflections-
    Thanks for the lovely comment..the poem just seemed to weave itself for me!

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  33. UnknownJanuary 6, 2011 at 9:35 AM

    A great interpretation of the image, Lyn! I particularly like the first stanza's admonition!

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  34. LynJanuary 6, 2011 at 10:02 AM

    Hi Derrick-
    It was just a little lecture to start with! This whole thing was odd because I did part of the poem before I saw the image and then the Prompt nailed it for me....synchronisity!

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  35. MartinJanuary 6, 2011 at 10:58 AM

    I really like this!

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  36. LynJanuary 6, 2011 at 11:43 AM

    Hi Martin-
    I'm so pleased with your comment..thank you for visiting!

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  37. Dick JonesJanuary 6, 2011 at 12:19 PM

    A fine take on passionate love reinforced with some memorable imagery.

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  38. LynJanuary 6, 2011 at 2:35 PM

    Hi Dick Jones-
    I'm so glad you dropped by, and I do like your comment!

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  39. NankaJanuary 7, 2011 at 4:21 AM

    Well interpreted prompt picture, beautifully expressed in your short poem.

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  40. LynJanuary 7, 2011 at 7:12 AM

    Hi Nanka-
    I really appreciate your visit and enjoyed your words..thanks!!

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  41. Doctor FTSEJanuary 7, 2011 at 9:19 AM

    This is a very well written piece and a thoughtful interpretation of the prompt.

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  42. Mrs.TrellisJanuary 7, 2011 at 2:01 PM

    a cool orb absorbs the light
    Cool? That's just like me!

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  43. LynJanuary 7, 2011 at 2:54 PM

    Hi Mrs. Trellis-
    I just knew you were cool!..always thanks for charming comments...

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  44. LynJanuary 7, 2011 at 3:03 PM

    Hi Doctor FTSE-
    This turned out to be an interesting challenge..so glad that you liked it..thanks..

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  45. Mrs.TrellisJanuary 7, 2011 at 5:59 PM

    Tend to your own ardor

    My sentiments exactly!

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  46. LynJanuary 7, 2011 at 6:49 PM

    Hi Mrs.Trellis-
    I do believe we tend to tell others how to conduct their affairs!! No, no...

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  47. SukoJanuary 8, 2011 at 10:46 PM

    So intriguing! You have some really powerful imagery here. :)

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  48. LynJanuary 9, 2011 at 10:01 AM

    Hi Suko-
    Thanks for visiting..poetry does lead us to interesting places!!

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  49. The Blog of BeeJanuary 9, 2011 at 5:16 PM

    This is a great read - love it. Excellent take on the prompt with some pretty amazing lines.

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