Saturday, July 24, 2010

MAGPIE/ Prompt #24

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PEEK-A-BOO

Don't think I can't see you
under the rumple of the sheet.
You haven't become invisible
and any creative mystery
you're trying to compose,

locked doors,
sealed windows...

What, vanished?

Your disappearing act 
won't be played out with me.

There's your hand
peeking out from under
the white expanse
that I tenderly folded over you
last night.

Are you kidding?
Do you really think
that an unwelcoming bed
will send me scurrying?

Come out,
come out, wherever you are!
I'd know the curve
of your hip, anywhere.
Oh no, buddy boy, I'm here to stay.

Just read the fine print
at the bottom of our document
of eternal bliss.


@copyright/all rights reserved/ 2010


Thanks again to Willow at magpie tales for coming up with such a challenging photo..please check the contributions of the other bloggy participants...more fun!


* Just a word of thanks to my friend and fellow blogger, Derrick at Melrose Musings for having written a most amazing post, A Growing Acquaintance, about my little book of poetry, "Two Ghosts".  Quite a thrilling experience for me.  In the exchange of our books of poetry, I was fortunate to receive Derrick's excellent, recently published, "Mixed Emotions".  All encompassing and original, as his blog always is..a treasure to have.


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50 comments:

  1. RAJuly 24, 2010 at 5:14 AM

    The ending blew me away... well done! :)

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  2. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 6:39 AM

    Hi RA-
    Thank you..a little fun with irony!!

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  3. UnknownJuly 24, 2010 at 6:49 AM

    The trauma of a tempestuous night or a solitary soliloquy, Lyn?! And thanks for the very kind mention!

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  4. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 7:32 AM

    Hi Derrick-
    You're quite welcome!!
    I think she's just a gal who won't take NO for an answer..

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  5. Kathe W.July 24, 2010 at 10:12 AM

    hah! Great poem! Loved it!

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  6. Sam LiuJuly 24, 2010 at 10:17 AM

    Wonderful poem, Lyn. You have a rather magical way with words, this was a joy read :)

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  7. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 10:35 AM

    Hi kathew-
    Glad you liked my little bit of fun! Thanks...

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  8. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 10:38 AM

    Hi Sam-
    Thanks for stopping by..you are more than generous, as usual!

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  9. SheriJuly 24, 2010 at 10:52 AM

    oh lyn, your magpie was marvelous! full of honest seaching and heartfelt disappointment, but it was the last line that nailed it for me! come out, come out, wherever you are, indeed!

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  10. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 11:44 AM

    Hi sheri-
    Thanks for your kind words...this gal was just off on a crazy rant..but she was not going to be taken advantage of!!

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  11. HelenJuly 24, 2010 at 12:26 PM

    Really enjoyed your Peek-a-boo Magpie!

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  12. CHummelKornellJuly 24, 2010 at 12:42 PM

    Fun. Loved it. Great ending.

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  13. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 1:35 PM

    Hi C Hummel...
    Thank you, glad you enjoyed it..not too serious this time!!

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  14. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 1:45 PM

    Hi Helen-
    Thank you..I enjoyed getting this together..making it fun!!

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  15. Carrie Van HornJuly 24, 2010 at 2:07 PM

    This one is so fun, and brilliantly written! :-)
    The title is perfect!

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  16. A Cuban In LondonJuly 24, 2010 at 2:12 PM

    A cracking poem. And quite spooky, too! :-)

    Greetings from London.

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  17. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 2:43 PM

    Hi Carrie-
    Thanks so much..I just wanted to have a little wicked fun!

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  18. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 2:45 PM

    Greetings to a Cuban-
    Thanks as always..sorry if I scared you..was it the peek-a- BOO???

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  19. JingleJuly 24, 2010 at 2:54 PM

    very enjoyable read.
    love the way your say it,
    I feel like talking or listening to you in person.

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  20. LynJuly 24, 2010 at 3:27 PM

    Hi jingle-
    Thank you..very interesting..I do write the way I speak..love dialog..have written plays..

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  21. joannaJuly 24, 2010 at 9:39 PM

    Lyn

    Your writing is charming and eloquent, love your tone and style.

    Yes to "eternal bliss". Well written, a joy to read. Actually read it several, enchanting and lyrical.

    Thinking about doing this magpie haven't for awhile.

    Joanny

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  22. signed...bkmJuly 24, 2010 at 11:17 PM

    love the document of eternal bliss..great take..bkm

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  23. Eric S.July 24, 2010 at 11:28 PM

    Loved it, I could see it playing out. I wonder what is in the fine print, LOL.

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  24. Tumblewords:July 24, 2010 at 11:37 PM

    Delightfully fun!!

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  25. LynJuly 25, 2010 at 7:49 AM

    Hi joanny-
    You're very kind! I definitely think you should re-join the ranks of magpies again..

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  26. LynJuly 25, 2010 at 7:52 AM

    Hi bkm-
    Thanks...Eternal bliss? Just a very good pre-nup!!!

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  27. LynJuly 25, 2010 at 7:55 AM

    Hi Eric S-
    Thanks for visiting..playing out as the revised "Who's Afraid of Virginia Wolfe"?? Sort of my inspiration!!

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  28. LynJuly 25, 2010 at 7:57 AM

    Hi Tumblewords-
    Fun is good! Thanks..I've got to go there when the iron is hot!!

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  29. Tess KincaidJuly 25, 2010 at 11:35 AM

    Loved the playfulness of this one, Lyn. "Come out, come out, wherever you are" is just perfect!

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  30. LynJuly 25, 2010 at 12:30 PM

    Thank you, Willow..I sort of have to have fun with serious implications!

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  31. christineJuly 25, 2010 at 1:20 PM

    I wondered how this would end and when I got to it I loved it and smiled!

    Christine

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  32. LynJuly 25, 2010 at 1:51 PM

    Hi Christine-
    Thanks for visiting..I guess she thinks she wins..but..maybe not smoothe sailing!!

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  33. HelenaJuly 25, 2010 at 2:06 PM

    That was sweet - it sort of took me back to my early-years' marriage....I should have presented a pre-nup back then, too....!

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  34. LynJuly 25, 2010 at 2:55 PM

    Hi Lena-
    Thank you- pre-nups...leave it to a poet to know!!

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  35. spacedlawJuly 26, 2010 at 3:00 AM

    I thought of a ghost, a fluffy ghost hidden in the sheets.

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  36. Steve CapelinJuly 26, 2010 at 5:01 AM

    Loved the lightness and the whimsy.

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  37. LynJuly 26, 2010 at 7:18 AM

    Hi spacedlaw-
    Thank you..I can see that, and who am I to say NO to a ghost?

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  38. LynJuly 26, 2010 at 7:21 AM

    Hi little hat-
    Thanks ...I'm glad it worked..I thought that there would be many more "serious" and brilliant responses!

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  39. FrikoJuly 26, 2010 at 9:51 AM

    This could almost follow on from mine.
    I like the poem, I like the idea of the hidden one, the playfulness of the interaction and the pleasures to come.

    Thank you for visiting my blog.

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  40. LynJuly 26, 2010 at 10:32 AM

    Hi Friko-
    And thanks for your visit!! Not all relationships run smoothly! Will check yours again...

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  41. relJuly 27, 2010 at 7:22 AM

    Sometimes the fun is in the hiding. ;)
    rel

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  42. LynJuly 27, 2010 at 7:45 AM

    Hi rel-
    Thanks for visiting..
    For this guy, I think it is..and then running??

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  43. C.L. SmithJuly 27, 2010 at 11:23 AM

    Lyn, I really like the rhythm and energy of your poem. And your use of assonance and consonance as a way of linking lines together..as in "under the rumple of the sheet" and the way "hand" is echoed in the later sounds of "expanse" and "last." I'm always interested in the way the sounds of words reflect their meaning, as they seem to do in those lines.

    Anyhoo, I look forward to reading more.

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  44. LynJuly 27, 2010 at 11:45 AM

    Hi C.L.Smith-
    I really appreciate what you have to say. I know that there's a beat in my writing, an internal rhythm that I do hope others discover..so I thank you..I'm always tapping my toes!!

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  45. Sandra RönnlövJuly 27, 2010 at 4:14 PM

    Splendid!

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  46. LynJuly 27, 2010 at 5:16 PM

    Hi Sandra-
    Thanks for visiting!

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  47. SuzJuly 27, 2010 at 8:02 PM

    oh the ending...loved it
    and yes it reads outloud very nicely

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  48. LynJuly 27, 2010 at 8:38 PM

    Hi Suz-
    Thanks so much..I like it out loud..gets rid of some agression!!

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  49. Jim SwindleJuly 31, 2010 at 3:39 PM

    A great ending.

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  50. LynJuly 31, 2010 at 5:02 PM

    Hi Jim-
    Thanks so much..I did have a bit of fun with this!

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