Sunday, May 26, 2013

MAGPIE...Prompt #170



                                                             PONYTAIL/ Last Exit


THANK YOU, Tess...at Magpie Tales...


BEGINNING

Before your face took shape
I saw a flow of will erupt,
nodded yes my baby,
I feel your heart alongside mine.

That vortex on the silver screen
is the spot where a blue eye will cry
if love doesn't pour over you,
run down each step of your being.

When your raven hair unravels,
I'll place a ribbon, invisible,
in a loop
that ties you close to me,

see to it that all love
decants like wine,
flows your way...
nine months to go.


Copyright/ All rights reserved/ 2013


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27 comments:

  1. CharleenMay 26, 2013 at 11:27 AM

    This is so sweet. Its a poem to keep and reread. Thank you for sharing.

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  2. LynMay 26, 2013 at 12:08 PM

    Hi Charleen-
    What a nice thing to say! Thanks so much...

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  3. BerowneMay 26, 2013 at 12:33 PM

    Beautifully ingenious...

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  4. HelenMay 26, 2013 at 1:09 PM

    I have pondered this image for a while this morning ... I think you captured the essence. I see what you see, Lyn.

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  5. 21 WitsMay 26, 2013 at 1:16 PM

    So very touching, and filled with loving joy... to arrive soon! I like your vision!

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  6. LynMay 26, 2013 at 1:59 PM

    Hi Berowne-
    How elegant..thank you!

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  7. LynMay 26, 2013 at 2:03 PM

    Hi Helen-
    I saw a tadpole sort of eye right away..funny about this stuff! Thanks...

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  8. LynMay 26, 2013 at 2:10 PM

    Hi Karen S.
    Thanks for your kind words...sort of fell into place!!

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  9. Brian MillerMay 26, 2013 at 2:14 PM

    ah lovely...nine months of anticipation at that...you do capture a bit of the magic of the pic...and of love that creates...

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  10. doriMay 26, 2013 at 4:04 PM

    Oh my god was that gorgeous! Wow, I hope many people get to read this one.

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  11. Other MaryMay 26, 2013 at 8:24 PM

    Oh my, what a lovely response to this image. So tender...wonderful.

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  12. AnonymousMay 27, 2013 at 2:46 AM

    This is exquisite! Charleen is correct its the kind of poem you want to read again and again there is a wonderful aura about it

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  13. LynMay 27, 2013 at 7:33 AM

    Hi Brian-
    Very nice words...thank you so much!

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  14. LynMay 27, 2013 at 7:34 AM

    Hi dori-
    Extremely nice comment..thank you!

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  15. LynMay 27, 2013 at 7:36 AM

    Hi Other Mary-
    It sort jumped out at me..thanks for your kindness...

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  16. LynMay 27, 2013 at 7:40 AM

    Hi mindlovemisery-
    Such lovely words..thanks so much...

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  17. Silent Otto May 27, 2013 at 8:42 AM

    I think you have given birth to something very beautiful here, my friend....such tender feeling

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  18. LynMay 27, 2013 at 3:10 PM

    Hi Kutamun-
    Good for us..we do go on!! thanks so much...

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  19. HelenaMay 28, 2013 at 1:59 PM

    I love this. It sort of ties in to my post today and has left me a bit emotional. I shall be back for second and third helpings of this fine piece. Thanks, Lyn.

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  20. LynMay 28, 2013 at 2:52 PM

    Hi Helena-
    Lovely..thanks for this comment..

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  21. Dave KingMay 29, 2013 at 7:11 AM

    Excellent poem that works very well. Loved the unexpectedness of some of the lines.

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  22. LynMay 29, 2013 at 4:10 PM

    Hi Dave-
    Very encouraging words! Thanks so much..

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  23. hyperCRYPTICalMay 30, 2013 at 7:28 AM

    Incredibly beautiful!

    Anna :o]

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  24. LynMay 30, 2013 at 7:58 AM

    Hi hyperCRYPTICal-
    Wow! Who could ask for more? Thank you....

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  25. Tess KincaidMay 30, 2013 at 5:53 PM

    Beautiful unexpected ending...

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  26. LynMay 31, 2013 at 8:14 AM

    Hi Tess-
    Thank you..as so often happens, the words are a surprise to me too!!

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  27. kaykualaMay 31, 2013 at 11:58 PM

    Full of anticipation and full of love. Motherhood is a noble assignment that only mothers can fully narrate with pride! Nicely Lyn!

    Hank

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