Sunday, November 11, 2012

MAGPIE...Prompt #143


                                                  Verdun, 1917/  Felix Vallotton


THANK YOU, Tess for Magpie Tales...


ELEVEN  ELEVEN

What color dust
have you become?
Did you drink in red
as you were sliced?

Is it soul or skin
that drifts upwards
to add a stain
to the eternal cloth?

I'm the shade of hell,
the mud trench we died in.
You sink into me.

A raven calls the time,
eleven, eleven.
On my back
dead eyes
stare at the azure sky.

Part of forever now,
I'm the blue in the rainbow,
don't search
beyond that
for me.




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20 comments:

  1. relNovember 11, 2012 at 7:57 PM

    Those who finish on the field of battle are the winners.... It is they who have escaped the tumult.
    rel

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  2. Brian MillerNovember 11, 2012 at 9:32 PM

    dang...you gave me chills...

    I'm the shade of hell,
    the mud trench we died in.
    You sink into me.

    and then the raven calling the time...really well played...

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  3. LynNovember 12, 2012 at 8:12 AM

    Hi rel-
    I guess finishing anywhere is good..interesting..thank you!

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  4. LynNovember 12, 2012 at 8:13 AM

    Hi Brian-
    So glad to read your comment..thank you, Brian.

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  5. Laurie KolpNovember 12, 2012 at 10:04 AM

    This is astounding... love the ending.

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  6. LynNovember 12, 2012 at 10:17 AM

    Hi Laurie-
    Thank you so much..very appreciated!

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  7. HelenNovember 12, 2012 at 12:48 PM

    Somber words, thoughtful words ... great piece Lyn!

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  8. LynNovember 12, 2012 at 1:15 PM

    Hi Helen-
    W W 1...always brings up the most haunting visions..thank you..

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  9. HelenaNovember 12, 2012 at 2:16 PM

    This is my fave so far! Lyn - I simply love:

    'I'm the blue in the rainbow,
    don't search beyond that for me.'

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  10. LynNovember 12, 2012 at 2:28 PM

    Hi Helena-
    I sort of hope that's true for me! Thanks so much...

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  11. Silent Otto November 12, 2012 at 5:59 PM

    so haunting, its true , what the raven says, it is folly, though perhaps not justice.

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  12. ~T~November 13, 2012 at 1:26 AM

    The very colors of poignancy. Well done.

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  13. LynNovember 13, 2012 at 12:50 PM

    Hi Kutamun-
    Ah, justice..that's the difficult one! thank you...

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  14. LynNovember 13, 2012 at 12:52 PM

    Hi ~T~
    Thanks so much for your comment, this one haunted me...

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  15. Tess KincaidNovember 14, 2012 at 4:46 PM

    "...part of forever now"...poignant and beautiful...

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  16. LynNovember 16, 2012 at 9:27 AM

    Hi Tess-
    Thanks for your kind words...

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  17. Carrie Van HornNovember 16, 2012 at 3:52 PM

    So many amazing lines here.....love this Lyn!!!

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  18. hyperCRYPTICalNovember 17, 2012 at 1:10 AM

    Beautifully written Lyn

    "I'm the shade of hell,
    the mud trench we died in."

    God it must have been hell.

    Anna :o]

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  19. LynNovember 17, 2012 at 8:15 AM

    Hi Carrie-
    Thank you..what a time that was!!

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  20. LynNovember 17, 2012 at 8:17 AM

    Hi hyperCRYPTICal-
    Hard to believe they thought this worthwhile! Thank you, Anna...

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