VENUS AND THE SAILOR/ 1925/ Salvador Dali
The rhythm of a Pantoum, feels like a dance to me....Thank you Tess, at Magpie Tales.
THE BODY'S DREAM
Don't take the dance from me.
I give my word not to wait
for intoxicating applause.
Just need my heartbeat to do a jig.
I give my word not to wait.
Dancing is my body's dream,
just need my heartbeat to do a jig
when a melody seduces me.
Dancing is my body's dream,
it bubbles from the source
when a melody seduces me,
weaves my karma into a waltz.
It bubbles from the source,
embraces me at nativity,
weaves my karma into a waltz.
Simply want to keep on dancing.
Embraces me at nativity
for intoxicating applause,
simply want to keep on dancing.
Don't take the dance from me.
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Lovely form...keep dancing Lyn...
ReplyDeleteha i love to dance....i dance in church, i dance at the store....i dance when i get bored....yeah my wife puts up with it...noticed i did not say i was any good...smiles...
ReplyDeletethe nativity line at the end gave me pause for a moment...
Hi Tess-
ReplyDeleteWon't stop! thanks..love the form too!
Hi Brian-
ReplyDeleteKeep dancing! Bet you're good.
Now with the pantoum, the line, when repeated, has to be where it's placed..no choice. That sometime gives it a mysterious, enigmatic meaning..why I like this form!
Such a wonderful pantoum form Lyn! Takes some good thinking it getting it done. You did it nicely!
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Hi Hank-
ReplyDeleteThank you..sometimes doing a pantoum really drives me nuts! But always a fun challenge..
I like your dancing ! me too-
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Hi izzy-
ReplyDeleteThanks so much...if I had it to do all over again I'd be a Broadway gypsy (dancer)!!
So lovely .. a complex form, you have mastered it, Lyn.
ReplyDeleteHi Helen-
ReplyDeleteThank you..I have to be very careful to follow the pantoum rules! But fun...
Oh I do like poetry written to a form. I've never tried this one, but you've done a splendid job.
ReplyDeleteAnd youll go a Waltzing Matilda dor me , Lyn, i cant dance to save my life, but my soul sings when i read your exhilarating words ! , cheers.
ReplyDeleteoh yes- keep on dancing!
ReplyDeleteI echo Tess's comment - lovely form. I have never been able to do these, and you make it flow effortlessly.
ReplyDeleteDance on! :)
ReplyDeleteHi Little Nell-
ReplyDeleteThank you for the comment..It does take a lot of concentration...not my best trait!
Hi Kutamun-
ReplyDeleteBet you can... Everyone can dance..just start by tapping your foot...let me know!
Hi Kathe W.-
ReplyDeleteNo chance that I'll stop! Thanks..
Hi Other Mary-
ReplyDeleteOne of the reasons I like this form is it has a life of its own...thank you!
Hi Trellissimo-
ReplyDeleteThank you... I will...shall we dance?
Oh this is so real...I have a dear friend who lives to dance and has made quite a living at it...but now she had to have a bit of surgery so she can dance again...yes, yes, if it's your dream if it's cries from your veins...dance...and dance and dance!
ReplyDeleteHi Karen S.
ReplyDeleteI will..I will!!! Hope your friend can dance again..thanks!
nice post thanks for sharing looking for to visit more..blessings
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