Sunday, June 17, 2012

MAGPIE...Prompt #122


                                                        Puddle/ 1952/ M.C. Escher


I THINK A PANTOUM has the right dimension to reflect Escher's angles....thank you, Tess, Magpie Tales.


FACETS

Last dance at the end of the world.
Pull me close, hold me tight.
We U-turn through time,
swan along the footpath.

Pull me close, hold me tight.
I reach to grasp your fingertips.
Swan along the footpath,
splash across a mirror.

I reach to grasp your fingertips,
polished into gleaming facets.
Splash across a mirror,
a kaleidoscope revolving.

Polished into gleaming facets,
we U-turn through time,
a kaleidoscope revolving.
Last dance at the end of the world.


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24 comments:

  1. Brian MillerJune 17, 2012 at 10:15 PM

    very nice form...love the repetition and it plays well with the turn through time as it spins itself...swan through the footpath, a great line...the inclusion of the kaleidiscope, nice...dance on...smiles.

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  2. Tumblewords:June 17, 2012 at 11:09 PM

    I absolutely love this - a pantoum of perfection!

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  3. UnknownJune 18, 2012 at 12:08 AM

    The topic is sad, the form is brilliantly clever and the play between the prompt and your poem shines, Lyn. Thank you for sharing your pantoum. It is inspired. =D

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  4. LynJune 18, 2012 at 7:32 AM

    Hi Brian-
    I do like where the form takes me, because after a certain point, the pantoum wins!! Thanks so much...

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  5. LynJune 18, 2012 at 7:33 AM

    Hi Tumblewords-
    Thanks so much for your kind words!

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  6. LynJune 18, 2012 at 7:38 AM

    Hi Linda-
    I like the similar (abstract) quality of Escher and of pantoums...thank you!

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  7. BerowneJune 18, 2012 at 8:28 AM

    Very nice poeticizing...

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  8. HelenJune 18, 2012 at 11:55 AM

    This is Stellar!!! Not an easy form to master ... which you have!

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  9. Tess KincaidJune 18, 2012 at 1:42 PM

    Oh I really like the notion of a U-turn through time...nice Lyn...

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  10. LynJune 18, 2012 at 2:31 PM

    Hi Berowne-
    Always welcome your kind comments..thanks...

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  11. LynJune 18, 2012 at 2:32 PM

    Hi Helen-
    I go to this form for something special..thanks so much!

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  12. LynJune 18, 2012 at 2:34 PM

    Hi Tess-
    It's the Escher that made me do it!...thank you, again!!

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  13. Laurie KolpJune 18, 2012 at 5:15 PM

    Beautiful, Lyn!

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  14. Silent Otto June 18, 2012 at 9:28 PM

    Awesome,Lyn , ifelt the sense of time and ending looking into this puddle, too . You wove it so well

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  15. izzyJune 19, 2012 at 8:38 AM

    Neat! great idea and it keeps moving I love that- thanks.

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  16. LynJune 19, 2012 at 9:26 AM

    Hi Kutamun-
    Yes, that's some puddle! Thanks a lot!!

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  17. LynJune 19, 2012 at 9:27 AM

    Hi Laurie-
    Lovely words...thank you!

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  18. LynJune 19, 2012 at 9:28 AM

    Hi izzy-
    A pantoum sort of forces movement...I'm grateful!!

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  19. JJ Roa RodriguezJune 19, 2012 at 8:09 PM

    awesome write!..

    JJRod'z

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  20. LynJune 20, 2012 at 7:43 AM

    Hi JJ-
    I appreciate your comment..thanks..sorry to take so long responding...my blog kept disappearing yesterday!! Fingers crossed...

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  21. HelenaJune 20, 2012 at 3:37 PM

    Very pleasing images from this! That last dance doesn't sound so final now - this carries it on beautifully!

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  22. The Blog of BeeJune 23, 2012 at 4:28 PM

    I too love the U turn.

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  23. LynJune 23, 2012 at 8:05 PM

    Hi Helena-
    So glad that you feel this way..no finality here!! Thanks..

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  24. LynJune 23, 2012 at 8:06 PM

    Hi Bee's...
    Sort of like it myself..thanks!!

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