Monday, September 19, 2011

MAGPIE/ Prompt #83


THE SNAKE CHARMER/  Henri Rousseau. 1907



WHAT A CHARMING Painting...Magpie/ Prompt #83, thanks for the inspiration, Tess!



THE EDEN CHRONICLES

No shadow under you,
no mirror image of your outline,
red eyes Morse code a warning
that seems an enticement,
an enticement that seems a warning.

Prickles on my neck
as you slither by
to the purr of the clarion.

Belly scraping rock bottom,
barnacles, scum,
a piquant soup.

The sinister hand stirs, beckons,
a whisper hisses in passing...
"She's to blame,
herewith in mud forever"...



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34 comments:

  1. Tess KincaidSeptember 19, 2011 at 9:17 AM

    I love the notion of eyes Morse coding! Nice, Lyn.

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  2. HartleySeptember 19, 2011 at 9:31 AM

    Oh man, this one really hits ya on the second read. Yep, blame the female, again, she's the downfall of the universe. Another beauty, Ms. Poetess!

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  3. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 11:19 AM

    Hi Tess-
    So glad you enjoyed this..couldn't wait to jump right in!!

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  4. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 11:20 AM

    Hi Hartley-
    Just blown away by your comment..thank you so much!!

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  5. Blue Sky DreamingSeptember 19, 2011 at 11:51 AM

    The whole piece sings...or hisses! Love it all!

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  6. Sean VesseySeptember 19, 2011 at 12:27 PM

    Why does no one blame the snake?
    I loved your poem. It made me think and smile.

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  7. HelenSeptember 19, 2011 at 12:43 PM

    I gave it the good old college try ... choosing which stanza was my favorite. No contest, they were all great!

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  8. LouiseSeptember 19, 2011 at 2:10 PM

    Yes, yes, love this one - captures the pure essense of the prompt.

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  9. MaggieSeptember 19, 2011 at 2:26 PM

    That last line is chilling. Great write, Lyn.

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  10. Brian MillerSeptember 19, 2011 at 2:56 PM

    smiles. we all look for someone to blame...to take responsibility from our hands for our choices...whetherit be the opposite gender or a hapless snakewho happens to be slithering by...

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  11. Laurie KolpSeptember 19, 2011 at 3:38 PM

    Ahh... this begs for rereading. I love it... especially the 2nd and 3rd stanzas.

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  12. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 3:57 PM

    Hi Blue Sky..
    I like that it hisses..thank you!!

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  13. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 3:59 PM

    Hi Sean-
    I like the effect this had on you...smiling and thinking!! thanks...

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  14. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 4:00 PM

    Hi Helen-
    I deeply appreciate your comment..thanks so much...

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  15. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 4:05 PM

    Hi 120 Socks-
    When I looked at this painting..so much was hidden..and then revealed..but that's poetry for you! Thank you...

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  16. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 4:07 PM

    Hi thingy-
    I think the last line is history..enjoyed your comment..thanks!

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  17. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 4:16 PM

    Hi Brian-
    It's fun to blame myth, to share the world with snakes..It's necessary not to let the snakes have all the fun though...thank you, always...

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  18. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 4:19 PM

    Hi Laurie-
    So pleased that you like this..I really sort of "caught" it!! Thanks...

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  19. Kay L. DaviesSeptember 19, 2011 at 6:34 PM

    Wonderfully well done, Lyn.
    — K

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  20. LynSeptember 19, 2011 at 7:09 PM

    Hi Kay-
    Thank you so much..I appreciate your kind words..

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  21. Erratic ThoughtsSeptember 19, 2011 at 11:33 PM

    Alluring words!
    I read it again for the sheer joy to enjoy the weave of wordplay:)

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  22. Isabel DoyleSeptember 20, 2011 at 9:33 AM

    I bet it's all lies, it was Adam that put her up to it, she simply wanted to change the subject from endless discussions about gardening ...

    fine conjuring Lyn

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  23. LynSeptember 20, 2011 at 7:54 PM

    Hi Erratic Thoughts-
    Lovely thing to say..I thank you!

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  24. LynSeptember 20, 2011 at 7:55 PM

    Hi Isabel-
    Love your imagination, and your scenario...thank you!

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  25. TrellissimoSeptember 21, 2011 at 2:13 AM

    It sure repays a second and third read. Very good Magpie.

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  26. hyperCRYPTICalSeptember 21, 2011 at 3:54 AM

    Great write Lyn

    Anna o]

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  27. Doctor FTSESeptember 21, 2011 at 8:04 AM

    The red eyes morse coding is a lovely image.

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  28. LynSeptember 21, 2011 at 11:26 AM

    Hi Trellissimo-
    I'm flattered to hear that..thank you so much!!

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  29. LynSeptember 21, 2011 at 11:28 AM

    Hi hyperCRYPTICal-
    Thank you Anna, very nice!!

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  30. LynSeptember 21, 2011 at 11:30 AM

    Hi Doctor FTSE-
    I'm sort of glad that this phrase came up for me...thank you...

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  31. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallSeptember 22, 2011 at 3:07 PM

    fantastic flow.
    your words are tasty,
    they make readers want for more.

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  32. LynSeptember 22, 2011 at 5:14 PM

    Hi Cello Strings-
    Very nice to hear from you...lovely comment..thanks!!

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  33. LynSeptember 25, 2011 at 8:22 PM

    Hi Steve-
    Thank you so much!

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  34. IntelliblogSeptember 28, 2011 at 5:59 PM

    I resisted much the reference to Eden! You make it work very nicely. Lovely poem.

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