Monday, August 8, 2011

MAGPIE/ Prompt #77


                                                      Edward Hopper/ Summer Evening

EVERYTHING'S BUILT IN with an Edward Hopper.  Thanks to Tess for this presentation for Magpie Tales #77.


DREAM GIRL
So you're taking a road
that's less fractured,
no weeds,
just sweet blossoms
from Aphrodite's garden
blowing cheap perfume
into your dreams.

How far will I fall,
without dawn in your grip?
Can I find a link
to another hero
who's learned to sweat
at five in the morning?

Pull down your canvas sack,
don't forget the honeyed words.
Grind them under your heel
with the half smoked illusions.
Pack them up.

Then embrace the smolder
till a new genie takes form,
and gargoyles at the window
giggle at your good fortune.


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43 comments:

  1. Brian MillerAugust 8, 2011 at 12:18 PM

    dang love the gritty undertones to this..the canvas sack, ground under heal and the gargoyles...tightly spun little tale...

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  2. kaykualaAugust 8, 2011 at 1:06 PM

    The picture painted of incoming uneasiness, ghostly episodes in tandem with the quiet and dark night. loved it!

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  3. BerowneAugust 8, 2011 at 3:12 PM

    Who doesn't remember those sweet blossoms from Aphrodite's garden?
    :-)

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  4. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 3:39 PM

    Hi Brian-
    I sort of felt like the director of this little movie..Hopper is such a "set"...thanks!

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  5. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 3:41 PM

    Hi Isabel-
    Thank you...love your comment!

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  6. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 3:43 PM

    Hi kaykuala-
    I felt that the painting had so many levels...glad you enjoyed the result..thanks!

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  7. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 3:53 PM

    Hi Berowne-
    Indeed, our myths are so captivating..thanks for visiting!

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  8. VictoriaAugust 8, 2011 at 4:51 PM

    To begin with, I love Hopper and his work and you've totally created the atmosphere that he painted in. I'm right there in the hard reality of the post-depression era, grabbing hold of what I can get.

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  9. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 5:06 PM

    Hi Victoria-
    That Hopper!! I feel that I sooo know him...a bit of cynicism after the depression? I agree with you...

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  10. Brigid O'ConnorAugust 8, 2011 at 5:07 PM

    blowing cheap perfume
    into your dreams.-

    great line, a great read, Lyn.

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  11. AnonymousAugust 8, 2011 at 5:39 PM

    This feels edgy and has a feeling of not caring between our two "actors" here. That can spell trouble...

    Well done.

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  12. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 6:26 PM

    Hi Brigid-
    Thank you so much..I think I should only observe Hopper!!

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  13. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 6:27 PM

    Hi bodhirose-
    I think these two players are ready for splitsville!! Thank you...

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  14. Jeane MyersAugust 8, 2011 at 7:47 PM

    wow, Lyn, this packs a hard punch. love the bit about grinding it underfoot xxo

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  15. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 8:40 PM

    Hi Jeane-
    No doubt, I really felt this one..thanks..xxx

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  16. Everyday GoddessAugust 8, 2011 at 10:30 PM

    I wish I had told a few to shove off like that!

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  17. MargieAugust 8, 2011 at 11:00 PM

    Great write, Lyn.

    *pull down your canvas sack
    don't forget the words.
    Grind them under your heel
    with the half smoked illusions.
    Pack them up.

    Awesome words!

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  18. LynAugust 8, 2011 at 11:06 PM

    Hi Everyday Goddess-
    Me too...I only write tough!!..Thank you..

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  19. LynAugust 9, 2011 at 7:51 AM

    Hi Margie-
    So glad for your comment...thanks!

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  20. SuzAugust 9, 2011 at 10:20 AM

    a wonderful tale

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  21. Maude LynnAugust 9, 2011 at 1:29 PM

    This is just a great write. Very tough.

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  22. LynAugust 9, 2011 at 2:12 PM

    Hi Suz-
    Thank you so much..happy to hear from you...

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  23. LynAugust 9, 2011 at 2:14 PM

    Hi Mama Zen-
    Thank you..I really like the "tough" part!!

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  24. LouiseAugust 9, 2011 at 3:11 PM

    Oh there was just something so powerful about this. Thanks for sharing Lyn and loving the header on top too!

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  25. LynAugust 9, 2011 at 4:38 PM

    Hi 120 Socks-
    Glad you like the header..it really got to me!..Also many thanks for your comment!

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  26. Kathryn Stripling ByerAugust 9, 2011 at 8:39 PM

    Hi Lyn, thanks for stopping by my new blog. I like your poem a lot, the muscularity of it---I've been thinking about the muscular structure of a poem. So much stillness in this Hopper painting...so much tension and waiting, the muscles tense, the action just about to let go....

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  27. Laurie KolpAugust 9, 2011 at 9:25 PM

    Great images... especially at the end. Love the tone of this, too.

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  28. LynAugust 9, 2011 at 10:18 PM

    Hi Kathryn-
    Like your new blog..and your ideas about structure. Hopper is all about finding the heartbeat..I like that in writing too. What is the subject really all about?

    Check out his famous Nighthawks..what a stage setting..waiting for Godot?

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  29. LynAugust 9, 2011 at 10:23 PM

    Hi Laurie-
    No doubt, I got wrapped up in this..it's Hopper...he breaks the barrier for isolation..
    Thanks, glad you enjoyed it..

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  30. Erratic ThoughtsAugust 9, 2011 at 11:14 PM

    I loved the way you have weaved words & played with them.
    Excellent!

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  31. LynAugust 10, 2011 at 7:26 AM

    Hi Erratic Thoughts-
    Welcome..happy to receive your kind words!

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  32. JamieDedesAugust 10, 2011 at 1:27 PM

    Lovely and plucky. Great visuals on reading. Thank you! ... Love Hopper too ...

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  33. LynAugust 10, 2011 at 2:51 PM

    Hi Jamie-
    I got a lot of help from the painting...without a doubt!! Thanks..

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  34. HelenaAugust 11, 2011 at 5:30 PM

    Great read, Lyn. I'd sure like that other hero link.... Nice visuals!

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  35. LynAugust 11, 2011 at 7:28 PM

    Hi Lena-
    Thank you..I'll send you the link as soon as I find it..hah..

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  36. HelenAugust 11, 2011 at 8:35 PM

    Lyn, this is beautiful. Every word.

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  37. LynAugust 12, 2011 at 8:17 AM

    Hi Helen-
    Thanks..so glad that you liked these words...

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  38. AnonymousAugust 12, 2011 at 9:44 PM

    nice images in this one...

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  39. LynAugust 13, 2011 at 7:23 AM

    Hi blackswanpoetry-
    Welcome and thanks for your lovely comment...

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  40. MaggieAugust 13, 2011 at 7:28 AM

    Yes, I feel a bitter edge in this, but so beautifully written, Lyn.

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  41. LynAugust 13, 2011 at 9:06 AM

    Hi thingy-
    I definitely agree that she isn't really wishing him well! Thanks...

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  42. The Blog of BeeAugust 14, 2011 at 7:30 PM

    Excellent - 'So your taking a road that's less fractured' - what an icredible line to begin a great write.

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  43. LynAugust 14, 2011 at 10:59 PM

    Hi Bee's Blog-
    I so appreciate your very kind words..

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