Sunday, August 14, 2011

LAST BREATH/ Poetry Potluck #48

                                                                 Bouguereau/ Psyche

FOR Poetry Potluck #48, we are given the topic of "Passionate Nights of Love"...


LAST BREATH

Frangipani under the bed,
wafting promise.
Tendrils of weeping willow
at my window,
when the embrace goes cold.

Dust finally defines my body,
remembering the past nights
when our touches
were made of dew,
as if Scheherazade
lived under my skin.

Am I dead still,
looking for a life,
or born all over again
to find your caress.

Banish tears from my pillow,
let your mouth taste my words.

If only last breaths
could summon up
the craze of passion
instead of fear.


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20 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 14, 2011 at 10:08 PM

    stanza before last is so touching, with a little bit of fragility to it, awesome word!! FELT!!!

    Enjoy the potluck!!!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/smokescreen/

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  2. Marbles in My PocketAugust 14, 2011 at 10:15 PM

    Wonderful writing! Sensual and longing at the same time.

    Here's my offering for Potluck 48: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/the-lake/

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  3. Blue Sky DreamingAugust 14, 2011 at 11:43 PM

    Every line flows nicely...works for me! As said before, a mix of sensual and longing!

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  4. MargieAugust 14, 2011 at 11:48 PM

    Lyn, another writing that I really enjoyed!

    *Banish tears from my pillow
    let your mouth taste my words

    Beautiful and touching words.

    Margie :)

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  5. Chim's World of LiteratureAugust 15, 2011 at 6:22 AM

    this was a beautiful poem about lust, and longing....its a sensual poem...great word bank

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  6. PhotoDictionAugust 15, 2011 at 8:06 AM

    Very vivid and lovely, it so captures the feel of two lovers caught up in passion. I especially like 'as if Scheherezade lived under my skin' for lovers weave a multitude of stories. 'Let your mouth taste my words' is especially sensual.

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  7. LynAugust 15, 2011 at 8:09 AM

    Hi lynnaima-
    Thank you so much...for me this poem was a walk with love and sometimes it feels like dying...

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  8. LynAugust 15, 2011 at 8:10 AM

    Hi Marbles...
    Thanks..I see it that way too!

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  9. LynAugust 15, 2011 at 8:12 AM

    Hi Blue Sky-
    So glad you liked this..I tried to really "feel" this one!

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  10. LynAugust 15, 2011 at 8:13 AM

    Hi Margie-
    So pleased that you commented about this..always appreciate your words...

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  11. LynAugust 15, 2011 at 8:15 AM

    Hi Chim's World...
    Thank you so much..it was really fun to do!

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  12. KalyanAugust 15, 2011 at 9:19 AM

    beautifully crafted words...really passionate!

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  13. MelissaAugust 15, 2011 at 12:57 PM

    ahhh, summoning Sheherezade - always a good idea for establishing the tone of a poem about the sensoual! :o) Enjoyed this.

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  14. LynAugust 15, 2011 at 1:48 PM

    Hi Kalyan-
    Thank you for your generous words, this was interesting to work on!

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  15. LynAugust 15, 2011 at 1:54 PM

    Hi Melissa-
    So glad you enjoyed this..liked finding the different levels.

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  16. LynAugust 15, 2011 at 1:56 PM

    Hi PhotoDiction-
    Happy that you enjoyed this..fun to do!

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  17. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryAugust 15, 2011 at 8:17 PM

    Banish tears from my pillow,
    let your mouth taste my words.


    love the lines, well done!

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  18. LynAugust 16, 2011 at 9:13 AM

    Hi Morning-
    Good to hear from you..thanks for your comment!

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  19. Jingle PoetryAugust 17, 2011 at 1:24 PM

    divine poetry,
    keep it up.

    Cheers.

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  20. LynAugust 17, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    Hi Jingle-
    Will definitely keep it up...thanks!

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