Wednesday, June 15, 2011

GOING.../ Short Story Slam 3

                                      Photo/ Melissa R. Bickel/ Short Story Slam #3


GOING...

They think I won't leave.  That the weather will keep me from leaving.  That I have fear.  That they will prevail.

I'm standing at the window, and not a drop of rain has fallen yet.  The sky has the message.  I will encompass you.  The heavens always have a message.  Sometimes to comfort.  Today, no ray of hope.

A bolt from the mouth of creation says, I will put on a show of force that you haven't yet dreamed of.  Well, I come from a place where a lack of sunlight enters with the day, and dusk is just the time to stoke the coals.

I'll have some soup before I leave, the pot sitting daily at the back of the stove.  I'll add something that was hanging in the cold-room, after I take a bowl, so that they will not suspect a departure.

I'm going.  Not with shoes.  Not with skins for warmth.  When I cut the cord I will go into the world like a babe.  Let them just try to follow.  Let them just try to stop me.


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16 comments:

  1. way too cool.
    love your take.
    smiles.

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  2. wow, Lyn! so much power in this - so well done xo

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  3. Hi Bluebell...
    Thanks to you for the slam...loved it!

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  4. Hi Jeane-
    This was an interesting one for me to do..thanks so much!

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  5. "Let them just try to stop me."

    Loved this piece. Great voice!

    Very nice job, indeed.

    Like your blog, as well!

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  6. Hi Bryce-
    Welcome, and thanks! Please read "Stand-in", Short Story Slam #2. May 31. Uncle Brice? hmmm...it was meant to be!

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  7. Loved these lines ...
    The heavens always have a message. Sometimes no comfort. Today, no ray of hope.

    Very well done, Lyn.

    Margie :)

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  8. Hi Margie-
    Thanks..the thing is to break away, I guess!

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  9. Love that 'bolt from the mouth of creation.'

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  10. Oooh, like the power, the determination in this one.

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  11. Hi Vicki-
    Thank you..that came to me like a bolt!! You never know!!

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  12. Hi Reflections-
    So pleased you liked this...thanks!

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  13. what a excellent catch...
    have a lovely weekend.
    ThaNKS FOR LINKING.

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  14. Fantastic I love the presence of this one and the ending. Great job!

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  15. Hi Jingle-
    Thanks for your kind words!

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  16. Hi mindlovemisery-
    Thank you..so glad you enjoyed this!

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