Friday, October 1, 2010

MAGPIE/ Prompt #34

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MAGIC LAMP

There is a core inside the lamp
that spins when the spirit dances.
He has the face
of the man in the moon,
hides in a recess looking out,

stares at me as I press closer,
my hands in prayer,
my mind craving entry,

wishing to be able to take a whirl
within a fabled orb,
to dance with my dream lover.

I'm ready to shed reality
for a glow of the light within.

What if instead
the magic tipped over
and spilled,

the oil bubbled,
and spread a flame
to burn all reveries?

What if possibility died in the fire,
and only a charred confession remained?

What if I'm the only one left
and then I find
the man in the moon?


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41 comments:

  1. gautami tripathyOctober 1, 2010 at 1:26 AM

    This is so beautiful. Great imagery...

    doomed if I do, doomed if I don't

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  2. Doctor FTSEOctober 1, 2010 at 2:39 AM

    Nice! You know how to handle extended metaphor. Worth reading more than once.

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  3. SezaaayOctober 1, 2010 at 3:32 AM

    wondefully written (:

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  4. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 8:02 AM

    Hi gautami tripathy-
    Thank you for visiting..I so appreciate your comment!

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  5. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 8:04 AM

    Hi Doctor FTSE-
    Very kind..I too did read it more than once!!!

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  6. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 8:06 AM

    Hi Sezaaay-
    Nice to see you here..and thanks so much!

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  7. Harvee44October 1, 2010 at 8:58 AM

    Nice images! Here's my Magpie, Blue Genie.

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  8. UnknownOctober 1, 2010 at 9:06 AM

    I love where your imagination takes you with these prompts, Lyn. A magic lamp indeed!

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  9. Arian TejanoOctober 1, 2010 at 9:35 AM

    I love how you tighten the lines without making the poem prosaic.

    The narrative is strength of your poem. So much mystery to decipher, so one has to read it again and again. Thanks for the share :)
    When The Lamps Never Light

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  10. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 9:46 AM

    Hi Derrick..
    Thanks so much, Derrick..I really like the prompts because I truly don't know where or how they move me..good to have a source!!

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  11. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 9:54 AM

    Hi Arian-
    Thank you for noticing the narrative..I seem to have to tell a story! Sometimes I too do not know what a line means, but I accept it anyway!!Such is poetry..

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  12. SusannahOctober 1, 2010 at 3:11 PM

    "What if the magic tipped out and spilled."

    I love the imagery and enjoyed your magpie. :-)

    My Magpie

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  13. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 3:39 PM

    Hi Susannah-
    Sometimes I think it's a privilege to be able to write poetry..we get to find other poets!! Thank you so much...

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  14. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallOctober 1, 2010 at 3:44 PM

    very clever and lovely tale.
    love the way you apply vocabularies to make it sound and fun to read.

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  15. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 3:50 PM

    Hi Book Bird Dog-
    Thanks for visiting..good to hear from you!

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  16. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 4:15 PM

    Hi Jingle-
    Always glad to hear from you and the nice things you have to say!!

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  17. Kristen HaskellOctober 1, 2010 at 7:07 PM

    I love that you wish to go into the lamp instead of getting who is in there out. I love that your dream lover might be there too. Reality is overrated! Oh, I really love this piece I surely do!

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  18. HelenOctober 1, 2010 at 7:26 PM

    Possibility dying in fire ... deep and powerful writing, Lyn.

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  19. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 10:08 PM

    Hi Kristin-
    You are more than kind..I seem to like entering other worlds!!

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  20. LynOctober 1, 2010 at 10:11 PM

    Hi Helen-
    I think I fixed it so I would rise again..thanks so much!

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  21. kathi harrisOctober 2, 2010 at 1:19 AM

    Oh how I wd luv a magic lamp.

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  22. Brian MillerOctober 2, 2010 at 5:50 AM

    nice. may your man in the moon, or genie of the lamp find you...well before you are the last. smiles. nice magpie

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  23. LynOctober 2, 2010 at 6:57 AM

    Hi kathi-
    Glad to meet you...and thanks!!

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  24. LynOctober 2, 2010 at 6:58 AM

    Hi Brian-
    Always kind and insightful..thank you for your comments!

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  25. AnaOctober 2, 2010 at 9:03 AM

    "What if possibility died in the fire,
    and only a charred confession remained?"
    Nice.

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  26. Angie MuresanOctober 2, 2010 at 9:49 AM

    Again, Lyn...WOW! I had to read it over and over.

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  27. LynOctober 2, 2010 at 9:50 AM

    Hi Ana-
    So glad you're here..thanks so much for visiting!

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  28. LynOctober 2, 2010 at 10:11 AM

    Hi Angie-
    Thank you..always glad for your comments...

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  29. UnknownOctober 2, 2010 at 3:00 PM

    what ifs snuff out the flames of possibilty

    beautifully written

    Rene

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  30. LynOctober 2, 2010 at 5:11 PM

    Hi Rene-
    That would be the worst..no possibility..Thank you so much ..

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  31. ReflectionsOctober 3, 2010 at 12:35 AM

    Wonderful imagery, nice flow... yet such a sad ending.

    Nice write.

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  32. LynOctober 3, 2010 at 7:35 AM

    Hi Reflections-
    Here's what I mean by "finding the man in the moon"..that possibilities aren't gone..that there's a glimmer of hope to start again..but then it matters what you see..that's what I as the writer find out..
    so thanks..if you see saddness, I meant for there to be hope..there can be both!

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  33. FireblossomOctober 3, 2010 at 8:24 PM

    A bit like the lady and the tiger. Decisions, decisions!

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  34. Tumblewords:October 3, 2010 at 9:21 PM

    A dance with words, this piece reflects such wonder and imagination. A delightful read.

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  35. LynOctober 3, 2010 at 10:42 PM

    Hi Fireblossom-
    You're so right..decisions, every day! Thanks...

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  36. LynOctober 3, 2010 at 10:46 PM

    Hi Tumblewords-
    Glad to hear that you enjoyed this..so kind..thanks...

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  37. Tess KincaidOctober 4, 2010 at 8:59 AM

    Beautiful. Now I must look for the man in the moon inside...

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  38. LynOctober 4, 2010 at 9:24 AM

    Hi Willow-
    Thanks, as always..It's all on the inside!!

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  39. Carrie Van HornOctober 4, 2010 at 5:43 PM

    So many thoughts in this beautiful poem Lyn...as always it is amazing!
    :-)

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  40. LynOctober 4, 2010 at 7:16 PM

    Hi Carrie-
    Thank you..I feel lucky to be prompted!!

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  41. http://howtobecomeacatladywithoutthecats.blogspot.comOctober 4, 2010 at 9:35 PM

    I love this one, Lyn! Especially "wishing to be able to take a whirl within a fabled orb, to dance with my dream lover." Wonderful imagery!

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